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Hi there, It's so long since I posted anything that I'd almost forgotten how to do this.  Well, what's the verdict? I don't often write Non A-ploted stories, so perhaps I should leave this sort of story to others. Yours Jenni
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 So beautiful!! Jose (who is sure that there is more where this come from )
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Jenni This is beautifully written. A lovely reflective piece!  Tricia 
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Lovely, Jenni! So sad, but with a flicker of hope... which is then confirmed at the end. Very sweet.
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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I have to say again that this is great! Loved it and thought it was well written. SQD(who seconds that motion for more like this!) 
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Jenni, that was *beautiful* I'll say more later, but now I've got to make our alloted 'cheat sheet' for my art history exam.
Laura
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It's very sweet!  Nice ending!
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Beautifully done,
And yes just the beginning of this story -- and similar ones to come from you, we hope.
Barb.
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Beautifully done, Jenni! It very much reflects Clark's love for his daughter, and how much he and Lois have done so far to try and save her. And the end, showing that love is the main thing that can save her, is wonderful and full of hope.  Kaethel
- I'm your partner. I'm your friend.
- Is that what we are?
- Oh, you know what? I don't know what we are. We kiss and then we never talk about it. We nearly die frozen in each other's arms, but we never talk about it, so no, I got no clue what we are.
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Very wonderful.
YOu really captured it - that feeling. That intense love and worry.
My first child was rushed to boston children's the day of her birth. She stayed there for 3 days and then moved to the local special care unit for another 2 wks. She was sick, but not as sick as the child you have depicted, or the many other babies I saw when I held vigil at my baby's side.
I can't look at the pictures of the precious little baby, lying on her tummy, huddled into fetal position with an oxygen tube in her mouth, and tape keeping it in place... I can't look at those pictures without wanting to cry.. or without rushing over to give a *very* annoyed and super-healthy 5 yo a big hug (you can hug her, but only when she wants :-) )
Your story brought me back there, but not in a bad way - because my story has a good ending, and I'm sure this fictional child's does as well.
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Beautiful!
I haven't read the Kent family series yet, but I definitely will, as soon as time allows.
Thanks for sharing that story with us.
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Hi, Beautiful!  MAF
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Jen,
glad you posted this non A plot
beautiful and sweet
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Hi everyone, I want to thank you all for your very kind words. I really was unsure of this vignette and almost sent it to the trash bin. With all these kind comments, though, I'm glad I sent it here instead. Thank you, Robin & Carol, for encouraging me. If anyone who doesn't know Clara's future but is interested in finding out about it, may I point you in the direction of my Family Kent series. They're set a few years ahead and are A-plotted, longish stories, but I hope they still manage to portray the love and strength of belonging that Lois and Clark share with their family. Sorry, blatant plug here. Hope I'm forgiven. Yours Jenni
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Sorry for such a late reply. I really love the story! I absolutely love the ending! The mood is really hopeful, and the end is so heartwarming.  L, I'm glad your daughter turned out okay and is now healthy. Julie
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Scully: I only get five?
Mulder: I remembered your birthday this year, didn't I, Scully?
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Jenni - I'm posting late, still playing catch-up. This was beautiful. As others have said, a perfect reflection of Clark's all-encompassing love for his newborn daughter, and the glimmer of hope at the end. This was a lovely addition to the Kent Family series. Thanks for not sending it to the trash bin... Kathy
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Very sweet, Jenni. You've always managed the tender moments in between your A-plots just beautifully, so I don't know why you worried! Hazel
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Clark: Superman gets the guys in capes, Lois and Clark get the guys in suits.
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