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Thanks again to my wonderful BR - Iolanthe.  Corrina.
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Great part Corrina.  I guess that Lana didn't drive from Smallville, so there may be a way to trace her arrival. I hope too, that Mayson had never bought anything from Prada and the purchase of the dress can be traced to Lana. Could we get part 9 tomorrow? Pretty please.  
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The Devil wears Prada! You go Lois! Poor Clark! For a minute I thought he was going to have to tell detective Henderson that he was Superman. Great story. I can't wait for more! Laura
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It's clear to Wolfe that Clark isn't telling the whole truth. Thankfully, Clark doesn't need to prove conclusively that he didn't shoot Mayson--he just needs to introduce enough doubt that a jury won't convict him. Lois is helping a lot on that front. Looking forward to the rest of the story. 
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Corrina: In a previous post you mentioned that you might not be following police procedure very well. I have to say the interogation scene between Clark, Henderson and Wolfe is very strong and well written. In my humble opinion it sounded like something the police would do. It seems strange the CSI did not look at the dress, after all, it was the only one in the closet. Also, where would Mayson get money to buy a Prada? Her job did not pay THAT well. It would take a woman of Lois' tenacity to discover the hidden meaning behind all of this. Somehow, you have to get the two of them together so they can solve this thing! After all, that's what partners are for.  All in all a great part. When can we expect the next installment?
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Lois is on the job! YES!!!
She can impeach the eye witness testimony about seeing Clark leave the apartment. She has another witness that saw Lana in the dress. Lois is a better investigator than either Henderson or Wolfe!
This is an entirely new Lana. In the comic universe she is a red head. In Smallville she is a brunette with long hair. In L&C she is a blond. Now she had dark, short hair.
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Thankfully, Clark doesn't need to prove conclusively that he didn't shoot Mayson--he just needs to introduce enough doubt that a jury won't convict him. HappyGirl, I respectfully disagree. Maybe legally Clark will be in the clear with reasonable doubt, but given his profession, he needs to be proven innocent and not just "not guilty." He and Lois constantly are in touch with the police; certainly they would never trust Clark again if there is a smidgen of doubt. He wouldn't be able to do his job.
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That's a good point long term, Iolanthe. I meant that he needs enough doubt for now that Wolfe doesn't think he can get a conviction and therefore doesn't actually arrest him. I assume that the truth will come out in the end and Clark's reputation will be cleared.
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I'm going out of town tomorrow and won't be able to check the boards for a few days. A new part tonight would be a wonderful Friday the 13th surprise! :p
Joey: If he doesn't like you, then this is all just a moo point.
Rachel: A moo point?
Joey: Yeah, it's like a cow's opinion, you know, it just doesn't matter. It's "moo."
Rachel: Have I been living with him for too long, or did that all just make sense?
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Caught up again! For now… Clark didn't know what they knew. He didn't know if he was going to be charged with murder. He didn't know if, when he left this room, his life would have changed forever. ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/midi/traurig/d045.gif) "I heard you wanted to talk to me. I came as soon as I could."
The spark of interest in Wolfe's face made Clark wish he hadn't offered the final sentence. He resolved to pare his answers to the barest detail. /nods/ After climbing the stairs, she knocked on the first door. "She realised the truth, and she was upset." That’s one way to put it. The other would be Lana explaining it to Mayson in tini-tiny words. "Mayson Drake was a smart, beautiful woman. Why weren't you interested in her?" “I have a spandex fetish”? "I asked him about his plans for the evening."
"What did he say?"
"He said he wasn't expecting company. I could have sworn that she had seen Lana enter the apartment from the way they talked in part 1. Now, though. Either, Mrs C. is blanking that bit out or she didn’t really see Lana after all. Huh. Mrs McCreadie rubbed her temple. "Dark trousers. Blue, not black. A dark grey jacket. Dark pink shirt and a nice tie with flowers on it."
For a member of the public, Mrs McCreadies's memory for detail was phenomenal. Oh boy. "Have you ever seen any other women come to Mr Kent's apartment?"
The woman gave a nervous smile. "You. But you haven't been for a while." She *didn’t* see Lana enter. So it was just conjecture about Clark having plans? Lois was beginning to understand why Wolfe had felt confident to build his case on Mrs McCreadie's testimony. She had exceptional clarity and could express herself clearly. I’m sure a skilled sleaze lawyer could make her sound like a woman halfway between Mad Cow (to quote Danny Crane) and the looneybin. "Is there someone else?" Henderson asked from his position behind Wolfe.
"Yes," Clark said.
"What happened after you told Mayson?" Wolfe said. Wolfe must be going bonkers by now  "She didn't accuse you of cheating on her?"
"No." "No. I was above him. And he was wearing the baseball cap. The red one I've seen him wear before." Ooooh! "So you didn't get a look at his face?" Lois persisted.
"No. It was shielded by the bill of the cap. And the collar of his jacket was pulled up." So, it’s entirely possible a burglar landed on the roof using a parachute, broke into Clark’s apartment, dumped the chute down the balcony, shot Mayson, and ran out the door? Clark took a deep breath. "There was someone else in my apartment." "No. She was inside my apartment."
"Had you given her a key?"
"No."
Wolfe's eyebrows jumped a little. "She broke in?" he surmised. And that would be unusual why?
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"But she knew the whereabouts of your key?"
Clark nodded. "It's a Smallville thing," he said in an explanation that sounded insipid in his own ears. "To leave a key under the mat." Wolfe shook his head and then continued. "So this woman? This Lana Lang from Smallville, Kansas, entered your apartment, even though you weren't there?" Happens a lot with Clark, really. "You had *three* women wanting to be with you?" Wolfe's question came loaded with derision. Yeah, sounds quite unbelievable to me, too. "No," Clark said sadly. "The third one is just a friend."  Michael
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Whew! Finally getting a moment to catch up on my reading! They would ask questions he wouldn't want to answer honestly. They had the training and experience to assess the truth of a suspect's story. Yup. He didn't know if he was going to be charged with murder. Most likely. You stopped *there?* How evil! After climbing the stairs, she knocked on the first door. "No," he said. "I didn't kill Ms Drake." Whew! Okay. Glad we're getting the whole interview. The only way to do that was going to involve divulging a much bigger secret. Right. Ooooh, Clark! "Do you think Mr Kent killed the young woman?" This is when you tell her that this is off the record and not for a story. "At first, I thought I was *helping* Mr Kent." Poor Lady. "She ... she had seemed interested in pursuing a closer friendship. I had been trying to tell her all week that I didn't feel that way about her." True enough. I figured the blonde woman had to be the perpetrator and Mr Kent was trying to escape from her. Ahh! "Dark trousers. Blue, not black. A dark grey jacket. Dark pink shirt and a nice tie with flowers on it." One of the few to call Clark's choice in ties "nice." "I didn't see anyone who could give me an alibi." Yup.  Because those who had seen him hadn't realised they were looking at Clark Kent. Yup. In the limited light, someone had assumed it had been him.
They thought Clark Kent was a killer.
And a coward. Yup. If this case went to court, Mrs McCreadie would make an excellent witness. Yes, she would. "And you do that here?" Wolfe gasped. "In *Metropolis*?" <snicker> "You had *three* women wanting to be with you?" Wolfe's question came loaded with derision.
"No," Clark said sadly. "The third one is just a friend." "You've seen this dress?" Lois asked eagerly. <uses dress to bash in Wolfe and Henderson's heads> "I'd do anything to help Mr Kent. He's a wonderful neighbour. I feel so bad that I got him into trouble." I feel bad for the neighbor lady. And Lois was halfway to proving it She *has* to be. <points to number of chapter> "Ah … a dress, I think." A couple of fragments floated back. "Yes. It was white. She said she'd bought it in Europe." See, Henderson??? "Did it take you all night to come up with a story that is basically a copy of the situation with Mayson?" Wolfe asked. "Oh, plus a baby for good measure." Yup, figured he'd go there. "Were you trying to decide the best way to dodge a murder charge?" Kinda sorta. Trying to figure out how to prove his innocence without blowing his secret. Oh, plus keep Lois alive and saving several hundred people. You know, a typical night. "No. She was wearing saddle shoes. Black and white. With red soles. I remember thinking they were totally unsuited to the dress." "I don't know," Lois said. "But all you have to say is that you saw a woman wearing this dress yesterday." She smiled. "That wouldn't be too hard, would it?" You go, girl! Why had the woman shot Mayson? Because she's crazy? How many times had he been there for her after she'd done something stupid? <tries to tally. Calculator gives up and starts spewing smoke> She wasn't going to allow him to be charged with something he hadn't done.
Whatever the nature of his relationship with the Prada woman. Super Lois to the rescue! Eep! This is getting really good!
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Sorry it has taken me so long to reply. Kate Good point about how Lana arrived in Metropolis. I didn't think about that. Although proving she is in Metropolis doesn't prove she killed Mayson. Laura LOL. But that wasn't why I chose that brand. It was the first European fashion label I thought of when I was writing this. Happy It's clear to Wolfe that Clark isn't telling the whole truth. Exactly. And that is a part of the problem for Clark - he can't (well, he doesn't want to) tell the whole truth. Morgana I'm glad the police scenes aren't so far from real that they detract from the story. It seems strange the CSI did not look at the dress, after all, it was the only one in the closet. Also, where would Mayson get money to buy a Prada? Her job did not pay THAT well. I admit - I know nothing about fashion. I heavily used the fact that the forensic team were all men. They may not have noticed that the dress was Prada. They assumed it belonged to Mayson - perhaps she'd changed at Clark's and hung it temporarily in the closet. They quickly checked it for blood and semen, and finding neither, figured it had nothing more to tell them about the case. Ken This is an entirely new Lana. In the comic universe she is a red head. In Smallville she is a brunette with long hair. In L&C she is a blond. Now she had dark, short hair. I'm using the L&C version - but she had her hair cut and coloured in Europe. Iolanthe Your comments in the beta confirmed my feeling that mere doubt wouldn't be good enough. Clark has to come out of this with everyone knowing for sure that he didn't kill Mayson. minimunch Thanks for letting me know you're reading. I don't think I got the next part up in time. Sorry! Michael Caught up again! For now… I know how you feel. She *didn’t* see Lana enter. So it was just conjecture about Clark having plans? Mrs McC definitely didn't see Lana enter Clark's apartment - she was at the vet at the time. But she *had* noticed Mayson's regular visits, so she was speculating that Clark might have a female guest. (Actually, he had two ) Her comment was meant to establish that she watched the neighbourhood. So much for his eidetic memory. Sounds like Lana really does not leave too much of an impression on Clark. True! DC She *has* to be. <points to number of chapter>  Judging by all your 'yups', the story makes sense - which is a relief! Thanks everyone for the FDK, Corrina.
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Well, I think Lois has enough evidence to convince the police that there is independent verification of another person being there. I am looking forward to seeing how Lois interacts with Clark, how she convinces him she does not believe she did the murder.
I am just glad I did not find this story until after it was done. Having the wait posting-time between installments would have driven me crazy.
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Originally posted by HappyGirl: It's clear to Wolfe that Clark isn't telling the whole truth. Thankfully, Clark doesn't need to prove conclusively that he didn't shoot Mayson--he just needs to introduce enough doubt that a jury won't convict him. Lois is helping a lot on that front.
Looking forward to the rest of the story. I think though Clark's main goal is to avoid going to trial. He really wants to convince Wolfe to not chage him at all. If he is accused he will be held without bail on the grounds of being a flight risk since he took so long to turn himself in, and then Superman will disappear. Superman will be wanted as a witness but he will become a fugitive from justice, even though he is in prison. Anyway, having a jury aquit him will not be enough. Clark needs a jury to convict Lana or at least have her be brought to trial on the charges. His biggest problem is he has not told anyone how he got away. There is proof that there is a third person, and Lois could organize enough testimony to point to Lana having been misidentified as Clark. However that still leaves unexplained how Clark got away. On another note, if I understand the forensics specialists did look at the dress but said "no blood, no semen, no evidence". I think the story has captured the reality that police look for the simple way. Clark was there with a woman, therefore the stuff belongs to that woman. She sued to work for Bill Church, even if she is now working at a lower salary as an ADA, so it is all together possible that she has lots of money.
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John A new reader! I agree with you about the benefits of finding this story after it was completed. I think it would probably be a more enjoyable read without the breaks between chapters. It was my initial plan to post it quickly, but then RL and my muse conspired to give me  Interesting comment about the police looking for the simple answer. I think that time restraints and experience would force them to do this. I doubt they have the time or inclination to investigate all the possible 'what-ifs' when a case appears to be straightforward. Thanks for reading and commenting, Corrina.
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Yes! Love that Lois has been finding out a ton of useful information -- another person in he vicinity of Clark's apartment, dressed in the dress, and that will match up with what Clark is saying about Lana, so good thing he told the truth there! Poor Clark! Had to sniffle a bit when he said that the third woman was just a friend. From Henderson's reactions, I'm guessing he knows exactly what that's all about. I sure hope Clark overhears or sees Lois coming with all this proof to help him in his situation! I did want something to go well, and this certainly counts -- I just hope that nothing happens in the next part to make it even worse!
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