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Comments are love. Now - I do have a version where Luthor is definitely a villain but I'm not sure I want that much of an A-plot. 
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Wow, this is an excellent set-up. Really looking forward to see what's going to happen to this Clark - can Lois track him down? Can she figure out what happened to her? Plus the pregnancy!
Let's just say that I'm anxiously awaiting further installments.
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Great start! I am definitely interested and looking forward to seeing how this progresses. Kathy www.chili-everyway.com
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That queasy feeling in the pit of Lois' stomach is a virus , right?
"I'm red-eyed, tired and drunk" Teri Hatcher
"Fun will now commence" 7of9
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Interesting. Looking forward to more.
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You've packed a lot into a short space, but I am intrigued about how you plan to wrap the story up in only two more parts. I'm looking forward to finding out.  An excellent story beginning. Joy, Lynn
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Wow, there's a lot going on here. Can't wait to see what you do with it...
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Delightful start. Now - I do have a version where Luthor is definitely a villain but I'm not sure I want that much of an A-plot You can always leave him a villain but something L&C are planning on investigating as the tale ends. Much as you did with Cover Story
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Very intersting indeed! Wonder how you will wrap it up in three parts - guess I'll have to wait and see (but I am looking forward to more of this!)
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Since I checked the challenge first, there's not big surprises in here. Except that Lois managed to extricate herself from Luthor immediately. Wonder if this has anything to do with a bit of physical imprinting that happened before Lois went back in time into another universe  And are you sure about the lack of A-plot? /remembers a certain nfic two-parter (?) where Nigel shot Lex just for the A-plot's sake  / /Looks forward to the next part and pokes a small reminder in about Suddenly Blonde/ Michael
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Well, my original thought was that Luthor was involved in the Congo problem and so was going to asking questions this Lois couldn't answer. He was also going to keep her close so he could find out how she escaped.
But I had also already decided that Lois's first glimmer of something being seriously off physically would be during her dinner with Lex - and Lex would find that a profound turn-off.
I may come back to this idea. But then, I may hold onto it for another story.
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Great start. Keep it coming!  Artemis
History is easy once you've lived it. - Duncan MacLeod
Writing history is easy once you've lived it. - Artemis
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LOVE IT!!! Definitely a great twist and i cannot wait to read more!
LOIS:I don't like you.
MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
LOIS: That makes me feel so much better
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This is my first stop back here and months and your story was the first one I clicked on and read and it is very interesting. looking forward to more.
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I would really enjoy seeing where you plan to take this!
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More soon? 
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Hi I loved the beginning, can we have more soon? Please?
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My apologies - I have been under attack by RL. I think it used an EMP weapon on us last night - computer issues on top of everything else. Then, I was half-way through the next section when I realized that if Lois remembers the events leading up to being sprayed by Miranda's poison, then she has details on the stories she covered with Clark in the original time-line. Which means she won;t make the same mistakes.
So - back to the drawing board, so to speak...
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if Lois remembers the events leading up to being sprayed by Miranda's poison, then she has details on the stories she covered with Clark in the original time-line. Which means she won;t make the same mistakes. Except maybe she feels like she needs to keep things the same, in this crazy new world she's in?
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