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Whew! That was a whirlwind but it feels really good to finish something in a day!

As I mentioned in the last FDK thread (in case someone didn't read over there), Clark's sickness as a child was influenced by Superman Returns. In my muse's POV, that was all a part of his body getting adjusted to Earth. Hope that makes sense.

Thanks for reading

~s

Absolutely lovely! And I'm so glad you posted twice in one day!

oh that was great!!! I love the way you write - it's almost poetry. Thank you!

So, are there any sorts of bribes that we could offer your muse to stick around more often?

I really loved this story. The change in writing style was interesting and fun to read. I like how you developed the idea from Superman Returns. And I always love a story where Lois shows up in Clark's life earlier than canon.

And I'm only sorta joking about the bribes...really, what will it take?

Amber

Wonderful with such a different start. I loved how you wrote it. Poignant, lovely and very enjoyable.

Kathy
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That was truly lovely, Sunrei. It was indeed poetic, and heart-wrenching, and soft and gentle and just perfect. I wish I could write so beautifully. Please, work with your muse to give us more breathless offerings such as this one. This crusty old man thoroughly enjoyed it.

So beautiful, Sonia. Your wonderful way with words gave this tale a thoroughly magical quality. And how suitable that was, since the story of Lois and Clark really is one of magic. But the story wasn't only like a fairy tale, it was funny, too. It was lovely! I have to tell you you have forever changed my way of looking at one of the characters of the Superman mythos - Peregrine White!



Fly, Clark, fly! Of course your boss should be a peregrine. And of course the love of your life can be described as a yellow-breasted bird with a singsong voice, which helped lead you away from dark and danger when you were a little boy!

Ann

This is so good that I am at a loss for words. It is a truly wonderful tale of friendship and love.

This has brightened my day. Thank you for sharing this story with us.

Bob

Yay! I'm so glad you posted!!!! That was such a beautiful tale! There are so many wonderful parts to this story.

I love this imagery.

This is SO true!

Loved this part.

I love how you never mentioned the word “Superman”, but it was implied.

I absolutely love this last line!

Okay, this was so much less angsty than the first part.



Okay, so she just quit the Inquisitor. But why did she start there?

Michael

So as promised, I reread your story here as well to get the NAoLC feel to the story. Still a great story, and I still love it. I hope you finish your other story and continue to write more. Still hoping to see Lois' point of view.

wonderful!

looking forward to MORE of your work!

This was lovely. I read both parts together and really enjoyed them. This is definitely a story well worth re-reading.

Thank you.

Corrina.

Thanks everyone! Like I said, this was a new style for me, so kind of a risky venture. I liked that it was flow-able, if that makes sense. That made it possible to finish quickly, so I might have to try it again one day. I know that in most cases overabundant use of 'he' and 'she' should be avoided, but I think we all knew who those characters were

I really enjoyed all the comments- I think those are probably the most effective bribes if any!

I'm glad that the subtleties worked- I never followed one tangent for too long (i.e. Perry White the owl as Ann noted), but there are all sorts of other stories mixed in.

Speaking of Perry- this was kind of vague, but I figured he wasn't really known yet. Maybe he's not EIC at The Planet, or maybe he's not even at The Planet- I don't know. I also borrowed from the Smallville version where Lois's first job was not at The Planet either. As Clark observes, their first meeting is all kinda mystical and foreshadow-y, as if Perry's been following her trajectory and is patiently awaiting the time when the stars will align.

And just to be clear- Claude's intervention was a lot more benign in this story than we're used to. He got her story, but nothing else.

Angst? I never said there would be angst!

Thanks again

~sonia

A very sweet ending. It made sense to me that if Lois wasn't a native of Metropolis she wouldn't have as much of a shot at an internship.

I'm glad that the black suit was a wedding tux and not a New Krypton suit.


Elisabeth

This part was so chocked full of beautiful sayings, that I want to quote the whole thing. <g> For the sake of others, I shall resist, but here are a few of my favorites:
Wow. I wish ( ) someone had taught me that earlier in my life. What a great attitude that reveals so much about Lois' life up to that point. I can imagine that her life as an army brat was just as difficult as Clark's. It was nice of her to share her wisdom with her new best friend.

I loved seeing how Clark grew into a Man (with a capital M!) and that he just seemed to *know* when Lois needed him to break the rules and be her best friend when she needed it most.

Loved this! I smiled all the way through their second meeting.

Loved this, too! This exchange was so vivid -- I know *exactly* what the "something else" was that was going through Lois' mind. And I can't blame her.

I got a kick out of Lois' absolute nonchalant attitude over sleeping together and was happy to see her share her trials and dreams with Clark. Although I can gather from the context what "safety off the nine" means, I've never heard the expression before. Where does it come from?

The mysterious meeting with Perry was delightful, as was Clark's story about his own origins and their respective reactions to waking up the next morning.

I've always enjoyed your writing style and I simply loved the poetic style of this piece. I can't wait to read more.

BJ

Everyone else said it so much better. But:

Great story.

I'm glad you posted the two parts together because I think they really deserve to be read that way. And reading them that way leaves me ... breathless, giddy, enthralled, amazed.

If this is what your muse does to get a kick start, feel free to go AWOL a few dozen more times. I pretty much have no words to describe how tremendously fabulous this is. (Though I gave it a good try. )

What an absolutely beautiful story.

Kathy