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Great part Nan! Bringing in Jack is a great idea, he should add some cogs to Lois and Clark's investigation  I was hoping Lucy would grill Lois further on the presence of her partner being in their apartment after two in the morning, but we all know Lois would squash those remarks pretty quickly. Loved this part, and I'm waiting for the next, anxiously! -Jo
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Yay, I was hoping to find some more of this here today!  Jack seems to be getting himself in pretty deep... should provide lots of thrills and chills <g> I wonder if he'll end up calling Clark... or getting caught by Superman And I love the way L&C practice those essential skills  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
--Stardust, Caroline K
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Nan, your description of Jack's burglary was absolutely wonderful. Your really are a master storyteller. The details including his planning, how he was sure that the boxes wouldn't be found and the window that was stuck was marvelous...and then the twist when Joey, Nigel and Lex came in. Plan foiled, but plan working. Now Jack is in trouble. Hope that Superman and Clark can help him. Keep Lois and Clark practising. Eventually they'll get it right.  gerry
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Hi, Great part.  "Much as I hate to give anyone the benefit of the doubt, Nigel," the American voice spoke again, "I think we may have to. Look."
Jack could see the speaker, now. He was about six feet in height, slender, and wearing a trenchcoat, with a hat pulled down on his head, nearly concealing his light brown, curly hair. In the bright light of the room, however, Jack could see his face, and the image was burned into his brain. He had seen this man's face before, on the front page of the Daily Planet and other, local newspapers. That was Lex Luthor, himself. Pooor Jack, he better start thinking on asking help from Clark.  More soon, please. MAF 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
MAF
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Nan WOW! Great A-Plot development! Tricia 
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Nan,
Another great part as expected
ditto others
more soon please
merry
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Nan,
I love how you are able to give us this great action scene, Jack and his break-in, while keeping the other "action" scene to break the tension.
You are masterful at this. I am enjoying every minute.
CC-
You mean we're supposed to have lives?
Oh crap!
~Tank
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