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#59358 01/06/09 09:19 PM
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Oh this was adorable! I love the premise and it was so amazing cute, i can't wait for the next part!


LOIS:I don't like you.
MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
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This was a sweet but kryptic beginning. Who is that old man?

Needless to say, I loved the snuggling in this chapter! laugh sloppy

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Curious and interesting.


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Interesting start, curious to see what you do next with them.

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Still wanna elope?
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He sighed and looked around to see where he was. He shouldn’t have been surprised. He was right beneath Lois’ window.
I’m not surprised laugh

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Lois smiled at him. “Yes, Clark, I know that you are a vir... a very, patient man.” She giggled. “But that’s not what I meant. I just want you to hold me and... and...” Her tone of voice changed to no nonsense. “...keep me warm! It’s freezing in here.” She rubbed her hands up and down her arms.
Yeah, right. Although, I guess the window IS open…

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Lois awakened a short time later and watched Clark sleep. He was smiling and she thought she might know why since she knew *what* woke her up.
Ahem…

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“Hmm...” He smiled against her soft, inviting lips. “That’s nice, Lois.” Then his eyes were wide open. “Ummm... uhh... umm... I’m sorry... Umm...” He started to inject some space between them.
Yep…

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Lois brushed her fingers against his cheek. “You don’t have to apologize. It’s a perfectly natural thing to happen to a guy, and I was rather enjoying...”
Lois! wave


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I like the premise of the story.

I am guessing our mystery guest is Santa *ho ho ho*, but I'm intrigued as to what the object he gave Lois for Clark is.

The dialogue between Lois and Clark often read a bit 'stiff' or 'fake' to me... it doesn't quite feel natural or flowing, although I did like the way you made Lois react to Clark and his 'stiff' issues.

Not sure about Clark's falling straight back asleep though... mind you... he is a man.... so.... it is somewhat believable.

Curious to read the next part of this story and see how it unravels.


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I loved the Lois and Clark snuggling bit and it made complete sense to me after what they've been through. But what was the thing that Santa (?) gave Lois for Clark?

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This is intriguing!

More soon please!

James


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Oooh! Great start! smile Looking forward to seeing the second part. laugh


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Thank you all for reading my story! I wanted to let you know that I'll be back soon with part 2. A family illness has left it quite unpolished and unready to be posted.

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It is interesting !
I look forward to the suite !


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