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Wow, I can't believe I get to start the feedback thread on this! OK, first let me say, I read and loved the first two stories in this series and I'm thrilled that you've gotten this one going so quickly.

It works. I like the first person narrative, and the switching POV, a lot. It really is a teaser -- it leaves you wanting more! I'm guessing Jay's nightmares come from something in his NIA past, so the mystery is why Ellie is having trouble controlling her strength. I can't see how those two things could be related, but then again maybe that's why I'm not an author and you are. We shall see...

Now I'm wondering if any of the others (Clark, Jon) are having this problem with strength control; if it happens during rescues or only in more intimate settings; and how exactly any of this will lead to Lois getting kidnapped. OK, maybe not the kidnapping, although we are talking about Lois here...

Love it, love it, love it. More soon? Please?

Beth, i like the premises. A lot. Seeing Kaylie and Jon was/is/will be great, but Ellie/Jay is going to be different treat. Can't wait to find out what's up with her control issues. Red-K, first real love, hormones? Something altogether 'Beth' ?

Michael

Yay, a new story!

Hmm am quite worried about Ellie. At least, it's not all that common to start bruising people during some action, but hey, there's no Krypton manual in stone. Will have to read-and-find-out!

:p
JD

Thanks so much guys!

CarolynK:

Wow, thanks! One of the reasons I was able to get this started so quickly was because I've had the premise in my head since the beginning of Honesty. And I knew exactly what this opening teaser thing would be like. As for the rest of the story... Well, I have a plan, but it's not nearly as solid as I usually have. Which could be a good thing, I think.

Glad you think so, Michael. There's a lot to explore with these characters, and I never really got a chance to do so when Kaylie was my primary narrator. Kaylie and Jon aren't about to fall off the map, but they are going to take the backseat in this story.

Yeah, this is going to be hard on her. I always liked Lethal Weapon, and I kind of wished they had explored it more (well, that's what I always wish with episodes that I like). Anyway, whenever I thought about a fic where the problem is much more drawn out, it never really worked. Clark just got really upset and ran away. But Ellie will handle it differently, I think.

Besides personality differences, the gender roles also make this interesting. Ellie is much stronger/more physically capable than Jay. Which may not be a bad thing by itself for their relationship, but they are being comstantly reminded of that fact every time they try to get close. Not to mention that Ellie is currently employed at a job she loves and working towards a degree, while Jay is unemployed, having been essentially fired from the last job he had. Some interesting stuff there, no?

Thanks everyone for the comments! I'm planning on posting on a rough weekly basis, depending on how fast I am able to write.

Not like you need me to tell you this, Beth, but I'm so excited you have decided to write this. Since the very beginning, Ellie captured my heart in a way that even Kaylie and Jon didn't, despite how much I liked Honesty and Fidelity. So, I'm so excited to see her more fully explored. And I think Jay makes a very nice balance for Ellie.

I can see why she would. She has, by far, the most energy out of all the characters, and scenes with her tend to be snappier. I'm so glad to know that she made a good impression!