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Hi, Great part.  I wouldn't be to sure about that. More soon, please. MAF
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Yay!!  More soon!!! Jose 
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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I just adore this segment, Taivas. From the now trademark witty and natural dialogue to the heart-in-my-mouth attempts on Clark's and Lois' lives, Clark's attempts to ensure that his two personas didn't overlap...and all the bits in between. <g> The transition from Lois being brave to breaking down was beautifully done - very natural. And Clark's comforting of her had me snuffling into my kleenex. And...whoo boy...that moment of connection at the end there.... Wow. I love these characters you've created...Henderson is a blast and your Lois and Clark just spark and sizzle off the screen as I read. Superb!  LabRat 
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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Very cute section. I like the interaction between L and C. More soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Clark will just be Lois' good friend, yeah, that's it. Just friends. Sure he will.
Good instalment. Nice natural feel to the banter between them.
Poor Henderson, what he has to put up with.
Tank (who thinks that Clark is an idiot to fight his attraction to Lois... why would ANYONE fight an attraction to Lois)
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Taivas WOW! A fantastic part! You did an excellent job portraying their emotions. And Henderson is great.  I'm thoroughly enjoying this and look forward to reading the next part. Tricia 
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Taivas,
good segment
ditto others
keep this coming more often
merry
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Excellent section, Taivas! This is shaping up to be a really enjoyable and very original alt-universe. The faint echoing of that scene in the later part where Clark comforts Lois too, and then later again as they follow Henderson, is very nicely done - very subtle, very clever. More!!!! Wendy
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Thank you all for you comments, it helps to hear if I'm hitting the mark with the story. I'll try to keep a better schedule from now on, barring accidents with my house plumbing.
And I heap many praises on my beta reader, Labrat, who helps me out tremendously.
Sincerely,
Taivas
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And I heap many praises on my beta reader, Labrat, who helps me out tremendously. Awwwwwww, thank you, Taivas. But when you're working with gold it doesn't take much in the way of hard work to give it a quick polish.  LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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