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Ohh, I'm first. Great part Laura! I love it, and I'm curiously waiting for more. Their kiss was truly romantic, almost makes me wish for nfic. But they are young, so maybe this isn't a good idea, huh?

Anyway, this is a great story, I'm so glad you post it!


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Great intro to Clark's weird ties. smile

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“Let’s go, Farmboy, you’re taking me out.”

That night, as Jonathon turned on the TV to watch the 11 p.m. news, he got wind of a forest fire raging in California. He hollered to Clark, who appeared a moment later dressed in black jeans and a black sweatshirt.
What, we don't get to hear about the date? frown

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A tear rolled down Lois’ cheek as she tangled a hand through his hair and he tightened his grip on her waist.
I feel like crying, too.


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I love this chapter too, Laura. It is beautifully written. I like Clark's tie and Lois's burgundy dress, and I like Lois seeing Clark pull off an amazing super feat. Most of all, though, I love how you write their young, tender, passionate, sweet love.

And that is what I worry about when it comes to the conclusion of this story. There is a sub-genre of Clark and Lois fics (or Superman and Lois fics) which take these two people "too far" (in somebody's opinion), and therefore the writer feels the need to restore the status quo. Infamously and horrifyingly, in "Superman II" Clark gave Lois an amnesia kiss to make her forget everything that had happened between the two of them. In LnC fanfiction, there is the disappointing "meddling H.G.Wells" subgenre. In this one, Lois and Clark go too far, as it were, but H.G. Wells intervenes and gives them amnesia, restoring the status quo.

You say you aren't going to let Lois and Clark elope, which makes me wonder if you are going to wipe their minds of what has happened. If you do that, Laura, I will still very much like your story, never fear - but I will not like the ending.

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Thanks guys! About their date, I couldn't decide whether to write it in or not. I was leaning toward writing it in, but I got the hugest case of writer's block... Maybe later I'll go back and add something in though.
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Anyway, this is a great story, I'm so glad you post it!
I'm glad too. I've gotten the best suggestions and comments here.


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Sorry just saw Ann's response.

Oh no, don't worry. I hated that in Superman II. It isn't that. Nor H.G. Wells. I think you might find out in part 12 or 13... But it IS NOT an amnesia/H.G. Wells/fly backwards around the world to turn back time kind of thing.

Definitely not.


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As usual, I love that Lois didn't get too mad at Clark especially when she put two and two together regarding her phone conversation with her dad. evil

Now, my question is, how are Lois and Clark going to have a relationship? I know that Clark can fly, but they're teenagers. What's going to keep them together? huh

This was a wonderful chapter and I cannot wait for the next part.


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I'm not gonna worry about their future. I'm just gonna sit here and wallow in WAFFiness... smile goofy )

Looking forward to whatever you throw at us, Laura.

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Glad to hear that you are not going to throw an H.G. Wells in the works, Laura. smile

And Pam, thanks for directing me to your story! I loved it! smile1

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Nope, H.G. Wells is beautifully absent. In fact, there's nothing "weird" about it, just to reassure you.

(Weird including H.G.Wells, Tempus, Time Travel, amnesia, etc.)


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great part. Can't wait for the next one.

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I've been following this story in earnest, and I love it! Does it have to end at Chapter 14??


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Aww thanks. smile ! Lol, well I wrote it like that, but I actually think chapter 13 and 14 need a little more embellishing... so they might be a little longer maybe... but anyway, I'm so glad you're enjoying it.


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