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Hi,

Great part!


Could it be possible that Erika stole the child?


This woman is problem. :rolleyes:


What does Mak knows about Erika?


He should have Clark on his side to deal with this woman.


Don't wait to long to post.


More ASAP, please.

MAF

Thanks, Maria!!

Yes, she is. But kids don’t always do what they are supposed to do.


Huh? Drull was Marisol’s father. Edrika wouldn’t have been old enough to steal her.

That Edrika is making allegations against Los, K’al and Rya that Mak doesn’t think are true. Edrika has made allegations that Rya was pregnant when she and K’al were married and that Los knew about it. (And while the allegations do just happen to be true, Edrika has no proof.)

Not as long this time. Promise!

Well, Nancy, it's no secret that I'm more interested in some of the characters in your story than in others, so let me talk about those who interest me!

Right now, my hands-down favorites are Chloe and Ben. I love how you've written their young love. They are such sweet, good kids, and in their own way, they are mature, too. I absolutely loved how Chloe handled that drunk driver. I admired how she managed to keep her "Blue Fairy" activity a secret from Ben, too. But maybe she should tell him. Having to listen to Ben's hero worship of Superman must be a little... frustrating, perhaps?

Ben, too, is a splendidly good kid. I love how he supports his mother. I love how he is gentlemanly enough to want to pay for Chloe when they go out together, but I loved it even more that he was able to swallow his pride and accept money from Chloe for his mother's sake. I also love that he is so close to his mother, and that he tells her more or less everything. His mother seems to be a good person too, and I'm sure she is trying to steer Ben down the straight and narrow path.

Now, the fact is that Ben and Chloe have had sex. Like Maria said, Chloe is too young to play around, that's true. But it's also true that from a physical, biological point of view, her body is ready for sex. Yes, it would have been much better if she had waited, but I'm not going to bawl her out because she didn't. The thing is that she and Ben love each other very, very much - I love how you have described their love.

Now Chloe is apparently pregnant. I find this situation absolutely fascinating. Chloe doesn't know, and doesn't want to realize, that she is pregnant, but she is bound to find out soon enough. I believe it's too late for her to have an abortion (and from what you have said of abortions on other occasions on the boards, Nancy, I wouldn't expect you to allow Chloe to have an abortion). The way you have written Chloe, too, makes me feel that Chloe herself wouldn't abort a child she was carrying.

So, Ben and Chloe are going to be parents - at sixteen. It happens. Right now, I teach a seventeen-year-old girl who is the mother of a 16-month-old boy. The girl is a conscientious student and a caring and responsible mother. Like I said, these things happen. It will be extremely interesting to see how the story of Ben and Chloe will unfold.

I'm also eager to see more of Claire. How will she deal with having been raped? Will she testify against Alex? (Yes, I really think she will.) What will that be like? What will happen to her relationship with Trace? How will she react when she learns that Chloe is pregnant? How will "the sisterhood of the twins" be affected by this?

Right now, I don't feel quite so eager to see more of Los and Mari. I have the feeling that their relationship is a doomed one, and I don't get very big kicks out of unhappy love stories. Oh, well. Chloe and Ben, and Claire, with or without Trace, are going to keep me interested for a long time. (Oh, and... there's Jon and Hannah, too!! Yes!!!)

Ann

Ann, don't be so pessimistic! I know that Nancy has two happy couples in the work, and she is considering another one. Of course, all of them will have to sort through some issues, but hey, writing about a perfect, happily-ever-after relationship is kind of boring, don't you think?

So, feedback for Nancy:

Won't do her much good. Chloe can still come and sweep him off his feet. Beth doesn't know with whom she's messing here...

Yes, Ben, show her! You got that right! That guy is so...

Sounds familiar.

I just loved that exchange. Well, Mari, that happens if you marry someone from NK.

Increased libido, hmm? Isn't that supposed to be related to a pregnancy, too?

Doesn't Ben know that Clark is a best-selling author? As was/is Lois?

A friendly neighbourhood Flying Sprite...

She's eating at super-speed, and Ben doesn't notice anything strange? What is he, galactically stupid? Or as blind as a bat?


It's so sweet how she avoids to tell him.

Well, one of you had to start talking to someone adult. And you won't be spared.

Yeah, Chloe, 28 or so days per cycle...

Especially since she is the first invulnerable mother-to-be. That's much more of an issue...

Hey, Zara is safely (and happily) married, so don't you worry.

So, will Hannah help Claire to cope with this?

That's so sweet. Imagine one of those logical, unemotional Kryptonians as a cat-lover.



Yes, Zara sure knows what she's talking about. There was a reason K'al and Rya were married so early...


Yep! She's there. Happy dealings!

Sorry it took me forever to get here...

I'm not sure how PG my comment is going to come off as... but "tender breasts" - I would totally have seen Ben comment on how they were tender all right. Can you tell what kind of stories I've been writing lately? *lol*

That little bit with Los and Mari - about consumating - that was just plain cute! Loved that!!



Nice part, Nancy! Looking forward to the next.

Thanks, Ann, Olympe, and Lara!!


Ah, Ann, I’m so glad you like Chloe and Ben.


Yep. I reference her rolling her eyes at Ben thinking her dad was taller than him when he’s only 6’ (177.8 cm) tall. Of course, I had her say that Superman was maybe 6’2” (182.8 cm). (Now you know what you got to post that pic of those excellent boots....)


Yep, but kids don’t always listen to the parents or do the things that they should.


Not doomed, but perhaps not as they wish....


Me either.


That’s so true! Love the icon's you are using.


Hmmm.....


He hasn’t quite realized what that means, and he doesn’t quite realize how much money that can mean for an author of Clark’s caliber. Gives me a little idea....


Yep...


Maybe that will hit him later. Right now, it’s the furthest thing from his mind. I used to work with an emergency room doctor who was so used to being in a hurry that he could polish off an entire pizza in way less than five minutes.... It was an amazing thing to watch...


Perhaps Marilyn can help a little, too.


That’s what happens when your mouth is stuffed full of food.


Mittelschmerz is a German word that means middle pain. It’s used in English to refer to the pain that sometimes occurs with ovulation. It’s mostly used in medical circles, but I’ve heard others use the word. I always thought it was a very interesting word.


Thanks guys!!

Hi Nancy,

Sorry, I've only now seen the next episode as I've spent most of the last few days running around "like a headless chicken..." and I will be going to bed very happy as it is now just gone 11 pm in England.

Wow, another brilliant part - moving, light hearted and tearful too in different parts and even a mixture of all feelings rolled in to one specific area too.


Stuart

PS, what's happened to Los' future grandson - you had him in a couple of parts but we've not heard any more?

Thanks, Stuart!!

Hehe

Let's hope.

Knew you'd like that.

The grandson will be back. And the youngest three will get more time, too.