Wow.
This one's just terrific. I know how hard it is to maintain a first-person subjective viewpoint for any length of time, but you're pulling it off in style! Seeing everything through Clark's eyes as it happens gives this story an immediacy and an impact it might not have otherwise.
The A-plot (somebody's stalking our favorite couple), the B-plot (Lucas Peregrine - hey, isn't Peregrine a type of falcon? and isn't that a clue?), and the C-plot (will he tell her or won't he?) are expertly interwoven, and each one supports and is supported by the others. This is storytelling at its best, and the Lois/Clark setting is an outstanding backdrop.
Did Josh actually push the cabin wall over onto Clark? Lois can't be lying, but did she see what she thought she saw? Who's leaving the pictures? Is the threat to Lois's life real or just meant to distract them? If so, distract them from what? Was Lucas from Krypton? What's in the box? Will Lois and Clark get skinny in their dipping?
Wow.
I can hardly wait for the next chapter, even though you're giving us more questions than answers in each post so far. Keep it up! I like this one a whole lot!
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