This is interesting, Ray. The concept of Intergang taking revenge on Lois after she's backed away from dangerous investigations is ironic but also somehow fitting. I'm not sure I liked how Clark got the assassin's confession, although I understand his angry determination. I'm not sure that confession would hold up in court, but it might never be mentioned. An American defense attorney would certainly bring it up, hoping to discredit the defendant's accusers to the jury. Might be very different in the Nicaraguan legal system.
Dream Lois was surprisingly articulate for someone who was not only dead but whose visits Clark didn't recall clearly. I never have dreams (that I remember, anyway) where someone speaks to me in such a clear and direct manner. But I rarely remember my dreams past waking. I'm probably on the low end of that Bell curve.
You showed Clark's anguish about being attracted to Erica quite well, along with his fear that he was somehow being unfaithful to Lois. That's a very understandable reaction, very reasonable, and his process through those feelings to loving Erica was shown quite well. I did, however, feel that Erica was a bit too clinical when telling Clark about the death of her husband. We also didn't get to see her surprise and concern about being attracted to another man, especially since she'd been a widow for two years as opposed to Clark who'd been a widower for five when they met. We didn't get to see her working through those same feelings. Maybe she should have had some late-night calls to and from Nancy, complete with tears and pain and fears similar to the things Clark was experiencing.
Overall, though, this is a good story. I know you aren't Lois Lane's biggest fan, but this never felt like a "beat up Lois" story. You showed her as a loving wife, a dedicated mother, a mature and thoughtful woman who just got caught in a horrible revenge plot. It's not often we see dead characters with that much screen time. (And yes, I've used the device a few times myself!) Despite your denials in the past, you are a writer. I hope to see more from you before too long.
