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Well, here it is... as threatened. A-plot. I hope you enjoy it more than Lois enjoys her beansprouts.  Chris
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Hah. I liked it more than Lois and her sprouts.
Nice A plot. And A plots don't generally do a lot for me. So, two thumbs up.
Jen
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Hi, Great part. 
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Nice, Chris. I like how your wild-eyed idealist isn't all that wild-eyed at all. I especially enjoyed Lois using all those fishing metaphors when she considered the situation. Very appropriate. I'm a little worried about CJ, though. While his bitter observations are no doubt true, they also seem to signal a regression back into the resignation of his pre-Herb/LnC days. Please let him hold on to his optimism! Even if Lois needs to wear a pink carnation in her buttonhole as a reminder!  Great stuff, Chris. Looking forward to MORE! Hazel
Lois: You know the deal.
Clark: Superman gets the guys in capes, Lois and Clark get the guys in suits.
-- Action Comics 827
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Yay, we've got more! Great descriptions of Saxon and his natural habitat  And it's nice to know it's not just all a fish story I'm wondering whether you'll be bringing Constance Hunter into the picture sooner or later, or if she's just a nod to the fans. The nitty-gritty of the plot was fairly gritty <g> but I think you did a great job of it. Of course, I used to type papers about air and water pollution... And okay, it's not criminal prosecution yet -- but if they create a big enough stink, they might find all sorts of information floating to the surface. PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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So we bring a little A plot into the mix. That works okay for me. Now we just need to set up some whams.
CJ is right, environmental abuses, even if found to be substanciated in court, won't even touch Luthor. He's far enough removed from the day to day activities of those companies to be able to appear blameless if he needs to be.
So that means that they have to stir up a few other hornets' nests so that someone can try to kill them and then CJ can connect Lois' death to Luthor and eventually bring him down. (er, did I say too much?)
Tank (who thinks that CJ should talk to this guy Connor about bringing Luthor down, maybe they could team up)
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Chris Excellent A-plot development!  Hopefully the environmental issues will lead to more information. Maybe enough to prove criminal charges against Luthor.  I'm enjoying this immensely and look forward to reading the next part. Tricia 
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Good plot advancement. I want to see Luthor implicated in something big. The guy's arrogance always thoroughly ticked me off, and this Luthor is almost worse than the one in the original L and C universe.
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hey chris. i like the plot. don't know if it's you, your BRs, or both, but it definitely looks good to me. i like dr saxon. this lead looks like it could go to bigger things, too. i believe bribing a federal official is a major offense... also like lois's fishing metaphor. nice work. also, thanks for reminding me... there's a toxic waste dump near my house that i've been meaning to look up. got a blood test coming up on thursday. we're hoping to track down the source of some of my health problems. your story reminded me to look into the site, and when i checked the EPA listings for my county, i got 68 hits. so now we have a few more things we can check for... anyway, looking forward to part 14. Paul
When in doubt, think about penguins. It probably won't help, but at least it'll be fun.
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Hazel: don't worry, CJ isn't going to get stuck in a quicksand of depression. Pam: why do I need Constance Hunter when I've got a handful of other lawyers to play around with? Seriously, she was just a nod to the fans... but anyone else whose name you recognise probably ought to be treated with suspicion... along with a few names that are of my own creation. No, they haven't got to a criminal prosecution yet, but give them time. I'm sure they'll work something out between them. Nan: I'm sure your patience will be rewarded re Luthor. Tank: Connor? Huh? Thanks to Paul, Tricia, Maria and Jen for your comments, too. Doubly valued, since they related to the A-plot! Chris
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Chris
great part
sorry I'm behind
I see part 14
merry
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