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#280827 06/05/18 01:16 PM
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clap Nicely done. smile1


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Thanks for the feedback and for making me start writing.


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Sweet ending. sloppy

Lois didn’t completely fly off the handle. She listened and she’s ready to forgive. Sometimes I’m not in the mood for too much angst.

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Thank you Ann. This Lois had some time to think about the situation and also the conversation with Clark's parents helped calming her down.


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Aww I really like how you wrapped things up. Very sweet ending.


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A great conclusion to this story! clap

I love that you went with the photo album/scrapbook angle. The point that he was probably terrified by these clippings but still kept them is perfect and cuts to the core of Clark's character. Loved the reference of the Berlin Wall too. Never thought about the timing of that, especially in reference to the show's timeline. Would make perfect sense for Clark to have been there.

Martha and Lois' conversation was perfect as well, and I think helped cool Lois' anger dramatically. That last line was just the cherry on top. laugh

Well done! Looking forward to more of your stories!


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