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Sorry it took so long, guys. I had to wait for my wonderful beta-reader to send this back. I'd be lost without her and you all wouldn't be able to read a word! So, call off the troops already! (Oh, I can't believe I made so many cry! Should I pass out the Kleenex for future parts?)

**small note-- there's 15 parts, so we're just about done. **

Aww, I cried when I read this part too!

~Liz

Hi,

Great part.

Nice part, SQD!

The only complaint I have on this part is that Lois hasn't gotten in her fair share of quality time with Clark yet. But I do look forward to seeing that in the next part or two.

For a while, I thought he was backsliding again and would screw up his life by running away, just as Lois and Clark, Jr. were afraid of. Good thing he wised up and went over to Port Royal. (Are you going to explain where Royal came from? I figure Port came from Port Stanley, where Clark was lost.)

Clark needs to recognize that he means as much to Lois and Jr. as they do to him. He needs to see they need to heal as well.

Clearly, Clark needs reassurance very much. He still can't convince himself he's loved and needed. Good for Jr. He's giving that reassurance to his dad in spades.

More healing. Clark needs to see that it wasn't his fault for what happened to him. He needs to stop blaming himself and accept that people love him.

So far, she's been the forgotten person. Clark needs to get acquainted with his son, but he also needs to be together with Lois to resolve the problems between them. Hopefully that comes soon. Besides, after all the WHAMs in this story, we need a few WAFFs to balance it out (sorry, Tank) . Lois is being very heroic, sublimating her own needs to be with Clark for her two loved ones.

He really needs to hear stuff like this.

Hope to see the next part soon!

Dude, so pass the Kleenex over here! I think in my case, it's more of a...oh, I can't really explain it, but it's not a this-is-too-angsty-cry.

*sniff*
Heavy stuff. It's so easy to feel Clark's pain.
Glad CK and Jr. are spending time together...wow the parents are gonna come over...I sense emotional city.


Keep it coming!
Jen

I think I'll take you up on that offer!!!...you are buying the kleenex!!

I was so caugh up in the story I started to cry and even sob!! my! your writing is powerful!.

I can't even start telling you how much I'm enjoying this

Well, I can't wait to see Lois and Clark having that talk. It's extrange but you can hear and feel it in the air already, you can even cut it with a knife!!. You created that air between them now you have to let us read it!!!

And why is Clark so afraid to meet his parents again??. I'm sensing he will need the ultimate acceptance from his parents to be able to start feeling more like the old Clark again.

Wow! and to think sometimes I wish I could write in my own language to give better feedback!!, lol. Kidding I hope I made sense with that speech !.

More please and sooooon!! 'cause I'm dying here!

Of course it's Clark Jerome Kent. Jerry is a nickname.

This was a very moving part: first the hug, then the kiss.

It was also convincing that Clark would have doubts even after theur meeting.

Please let Clark and Lois find themselves, also.

SQD

A wonderful part! I had tears in my eyes while reading it.
Clark Jr. is definitely what Clark needs to help him heal.

I did feel sorry for Lois in this section. She seems to be on the outside at the moment.

I can't wait for Clark to be reunited with his parents.
Please post the next part soon.

Tricia

I believe it's OK to bring Luthor down so that he can't never do anything alike to others, though there is certainly a question of ends and means.

How very true! I have four of those floating around here--guess that's why I tend to write about kids so much.

You're exactly right, Gabrielle. Thanks for the explanation for me!

Actually, I never thought of Port Stanley, but I like that idea, me. I used Port Royal from a building in a city close to me. It started out as a hotel on the river(it's right on the bank), but has since evolved into condos and shops. It also houses Fort Discovery(the science museum). I've just always liked that name. Port Royal-- sounds so impressive!

I'm passing it out by the box!

Give me a day or two to get it tweaked! Sheesh! I just got those little guys off my tail!

Lois will get her turn. Everyone just hang in there.

I love how there are multiple post from some of the same people. Do you guys read these sections numerous times? And the wonderful words... I still find it hard to believe I've written a story that is so... WOW! Thanks everyone!

Another wow, SQD. I just love the interaction between father and son. This boy is incredibly perceptive for a 9-year-old. My own son is 10, and as much as I adore him and think that he is the most wonderful child in the world (which he is ), I could not begin to imagine him reacting in such a mature and clear-headed fashion if he were in similar circumstances. It must be those "super" genes.

I was worried when I first started reading the section and I thought that Clark was talking himself out of all of this. Was very glad to realize that it was another nightmare. And was also glad to see some of the reaction-to-the-kryptonite-in-the-cell that had been mentioned from early on. (I'm still hoping that you also go back and put some physical reaction back in the earlier section, of course ).

Poor Clark...
I'm so happy that he's gradually recognizing that all of this wasn't his fault. So since he cannot undo the past, he needs to alter his anticipated course for the present, and he's doing that. He's not running away from this, he is taking the small steps forward towards his family. And as he's finding, they are more than happy to meet him more than halfway.

I was surprised to see this... The part that surprised me was "Did he still love Lois?" I thought he had already admitted to himself earlier that he did, that he would always love her. I realize that he may have thought that he was no longer worthy to be with her, that she couldn't possibly love him anymore since he thought he had become a totally different man, but that is another issue...

15 Parts total? Not much time left. He still has to meet his parents, do something about Lex (even if it turns out not to be as gruesome a revenge as he had originally envisioned), and we need some major one-on-one time with Lois. I assume that she will be able to continue to soothe him through these doubts. And now that he's already held her in his arms when carrying her to bed (even though he seemed almost unaware of it), it should be easier to hold her again. I'm looking forward to it immensely, even though Clark will be nervous.

KathyM

Oh, and in answer to your question, SQD, Speaking only for myself, obviously that must be "yes"... I often pop back into Comments threads after I have posted to see what others have said. I'm curious to know what others think, if they have the same reactions as I did. And I find that people pick up on different things, so I've often "learned" things or read a comment that made me go "hmmm"

Hey SQD

That was a great part...

It was sweet...

All i want to was

Wow that was so sweet and touching. I loved this chapter and I am looking forward to more with his parents and Lois too. great job. Laura

Stopquitdont
I loved this
very emotional and sweet
Now get L&C together
merry

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I'm not sure, but I think I've done a decent job portraying those intentions.

Decently is putting it far too mildly. It is "emoting" beautifully (but with a smile)

doublel

maybe someone needs to do an icon of a tissue box with tears