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Okay, this is where life gets a little scarier. This is the last of my buffer. I have about a third of the next part written, and hope to get a lot more done this weekend. Nag... I mean constructive criticism is much appreciated. Irene 
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Irene, Wow, I feel bad for Lois because she's lost everything, but I am sort of mad at her for being so stupid  . But I guess she does have a good point about the Pheremones... “Not in a Metropolis minute!” she said vehemently. This seriously had me  . - Alicia
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Very fun story, Irene!!
Love how Clark is starting to become jealous of himself!! Wonderful touch in having him find what was left of her Kerth awards.
Hope you get a lot written this weekend!
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Well, this is sort of progress... at least now Clark knows the reason Lois had been so snarky; although what he's going to do about it is a whole other story. Nice of him to find her plaques -- and smart of him to take them over as Clark! Good to know Cat rose to the challenge, too Now hurry up and write the rest!! I happen to know you have some free time on Wednesday so you have no excuse!  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
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Hi, Great part.  :rolleyes: Clark make a mess of this. He is responsible for what happen, just be cause the only way he could be near her is being Supernan.  What would have happen if Lois instead of asking him out, she said she was leaving Metropolis, she can work from another Planet bureau. I don't think he'll survive. More soon, please. MAF 
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It's great that Clark now knows why Lois has been upset with him. Now that he suspects she has some interest in him, maybe he can use these "dates" to show just how well they do in romantic settings. Maybe? My only disappointment is that Lois is in a hotel instead of staying with her best friend. Can't imagine she can afford to stay in a luxury suite for long, now can she?  Great story! Can't wait for the next part. 
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Irene, I was about to nag about how short this was until I read your fdk comment so I guess we will be happy and hope you find time to write more! Clark definitely painted himself into a corner with his comments about not being attracted to Lois. Good for you for making him face it. Doesn't seem like she can get over it though without a full confession of how he was NEVER affected by it! Looking forward to more, and I'll get in line to do some nagging too!
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Irene,
another good part as expected
you have a lot of writing to do - because you can't post quickly enough for me
more soon please
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Irene WOW! I love this.  Should be a lot of fun! I'm thoroughly enjoying this and look forward to reading the next part. Tricia 
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Great banter and excellent verbal timing. I loved how the truth of the attraction issue came out. Very smooth. Now if you can just get Lois to wear one of Cat's 'questionable' outfits on a date with Clark..... On well with the muse. We're awaitin'! Sherry
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I can see this turning into a comedy now... Clark takes Lois out on a "date", takes her home, leaves, spins into Suit and taps on Lois' window, repeat. He's bound to slip up somewhere...should be good! Hope we see more soon..great stuff!! ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Oh poor Clark! How are they going to pull this one off! More soon. Laura
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hey, it's the honeymoon suite! love cat making that happen. wonder how hard she tried before she gave up and said that was the only room she could get. hope she gave lois the grand tour. then again, maybe not. anyway, glad to see that clark has a better understanding of lois's feelings. and good for him getting those kerth plaques. love this line: He grinned. “As opposed to all the people who do know you who still want to kill you, I guess?” poor clark, though. this whole situation is really tearing him in two, isn't it? love the last line about "three's a crowd" and "don't i know it..." sad, in a way, but also really really funny. can't wait to see what happens next. oh, wait a sec. i don't have to!   Paul
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Thanks, Alicia, Missy, Pam, Maria, me, Trenna, merry, Tricia, Sherry, Liz, Laura and Paul. I appreciate the comments. Alicia, the Metropolis minute comment can be directly attributed to a suggestion of one of my fantastic beta-readers. (Thanks, Paul!) Pam, I made other plans for Wednesday. (Yes, you can be replaced - just kidding.) I had actually made plans to get together in London in the morning with someone in the same business as me to get tips and suggestions and then go from there to meet you and your family. I still plan on going. I just wish that I had two appointments that day instead of just one.  me, good point about the cost of the hotel suite, but this is being paid for by the insurance company. Not Lois's fault that the only free room in town was the honeymoon suite. Personally, I think the convention is of ABC - no, not the TV station - ABC, American Bowling Convention. Doug and I went to Niagara Falls for a weekend shortly after we were married. We ended up not being able to get a room at the hotel we wanted or eat in the restaurants we wanted because of the ABC bowlers. It is still a family joke! Paul, I love your evil icon! Yes, I finished the next section and emailed it to Paul and Wendy today - not a hundred percent happy with it - but I'm sure Paul and Wendy will have some great suggestions for me. Thanks again for the great comments. It really helps to keep me motivated to work on this. Now, I have to write about Lois's date with Clark. Irene
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Now, Irene does do good comedy. I wonder if she will, indeed, head down that path...? I repeat: Clark is an idiot. I always thought he shot himself royally in the foot with his stupid behavior in PML: dismiss her as Clark, yet kiss her as Superman? Wallow in it, Clark, because you deserve every minute of it. Get that buffer moving, Irene! I want MORE! Hazel
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Irene, good instalment, even if it was rather short.
These little bites of your story are really fueling the gentle readers anticipation levels.
Liked the humerous banter amid the depression that Lois is obviously feeling. It feels right for them.
Yep, it appears that Clark is going to rue the day that he made that smart aleck comment about not being attracted to her. The dual dating thing is not only going to get complicated and frustrating for Clark, but I see it becoming very confusing for Lois also. Should be a fun ride.
Tank (who figures with the holiday weekend coming up, Irene should be able to find some extra time to write)
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OK, Irene, let's try my comments again. I really liked the banter in the hotel room between Clark and Lois. Very them. Clark was such an idiot in PML, denying his feelings for Lois as Clark yet admitting them as Superman. But of course the show had to continue the CK/LL/S love-triangle... But a fanfic author has free rein to explore Clark's idiocy in all its delicious ramifications, and I'm so enjoying watching this story develop. How is Clark going to handle dating Lois in both his personas?  KathyM
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Another excellent segment, Irene. Loved the banter and the atmosphere of 'friends giving comfort' was beautifully envoked. She reverently cradled the engraved plaques that were all that was left of her Kerth awards. “You two are the best! Just the best! Thank you so much!” Her eyes welled up with tears. Hers weren't the only ones.  Some nice moments of revelation too - like everyone else, eager to see how that date goes and what Clark is going to do with this new information. LabRat
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Nice story. Looking forward to the next part, and wondering how Clark will ever get out of this mess he's made!
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Irene, I'm catching up with this via the TOC - can you update it please? You only have up to part four listed there... Looking forward to reading this!
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