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Yeah, first to post!  Loving a new story so soon. I would have thought that the cocktail sauce would have set off the ulcer too. Love seeing someone falling in like or love. Hope it isn't too good to be true. James I'll update the main outline when I get a moment.
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Poor Strike Commander Fong! He's definitely in the wrong profession.
I saw some of this awhile back and it looked really interesting, but it was nowhere near finished. I can't wait to see what happens in this!
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I re-read the story before i started editing it. I'd forgotten how good it was -- if I do say so myself. <g>
Since there probably won't be many readers, let's use this as the feedback thread for the whole story.
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Jason, Trevor, and Blashvor return - yay!
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Woohoo!  another TU story. More soon Please? 
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I am so excited to see more of Jason's story posted! I'm very curious about Mai...this story already looks fantastic! Amber 
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Poor Fong! All these things going on that he doesn't know about!  Tara
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FDK Part 2:
Yeah, more Jason and Trev. So three years have passed. Since the last story.
The title of the story is intriguing enough, but adding a pirate showdown is like frosting to the cake.
More soon please.
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FDK 3 :
Wow, so Wing seems to be a psychic and Fong seems to be connected to her.
I have got to reread this entire series. Reading them out of order is messing with my mind.
In Slave Race. Blashvor's name was Blashvar for a while. Remind me why that was?
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FDK 4: Best line goes to Blashvor. Fong, awaken Jason and stop brooding about Miss Wing. Be assured that she is quite fond of you -- more so than she is of my servant Trevor, whom she simply admires for his animalistic attraction."  James
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I also updated the big timeline.
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"In Slave Race. Blashvor's name was Blashvar for a while. Remind me why that was?"
When a male Jilectan's father is still alive, the suffix to his name is "ar". After his father has passed on, the suffix changes to "or".
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Too short. Nice furthering if the plot.
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Too short. Nice furthering if the plot.
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The Skelzir! Was this mentioned in a previous fic? (I haven't read the whole Terran Underground series.) Things sound ominous. Is the globe thing self-willed? If not, who is sending it after Blashvor et al? How are our heroes going to get out of their plight?
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The Skelzir Globe was prominently featured in "The Crystal Demon".
Briefly, the globes are alive, powerful psychics and inimical to other life forms. They are extremely dangerous, as Blashvor said, and as will be demonstrated later in the story.
For a better understanding of the globes, read The Crystal Demon. It's a fairly long story, and in it Alan Westover meets his female psychic partner, Lyn Parnell and you learn how the first one was destroyed.
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Ah, the joy of skelzir globes! Definitely not something I'd ever want to run across! I think I'd want one of those artificial mind shields the Centaurs came up with if I ran into one, kwim?
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PS: When can we expect more? I don't have a lot of fun fiction to read right now!
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PS: When can we expect more? I don't have a lot of fun fiction to read right now! I'll second that. More Soon Please Janine
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I'll get it done as soon as I can, Janine. I was in the hospital from Friday to Monday, with a kidney stone, blocked ureter and sepsis. I was hooked up to IV antibiotics and getting stuck for blood every time I turned around, day and night. I'm finally home and trying to get caught up.
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Take your time, Mom. We can wait for you to recuperate. Let me know if you need anything.
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Poor Fong is completely out of his depth, isn't he? lol!
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I'll get it done as soon as I can. I was in the hospital from Friday to Monday, with a kidney stone, blocked ureter and sepsis. OMG, how painful that must have been! My thoughts and prayers are with you for a rapid and complete recovery.
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I was in the hospital from Friday to Monday, with a kidney stone, blocked ureter and sepsis  Well that sucks. Hope you're feeling better. Janine
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A cave full of dead Patrolmen! (It sure sounds like they're dead, from your description of the smell.) This is ominous. What killed them and is it still out there?
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Ooh, dead trolls. I have a hunch this links into the Skelzir globes somehow.
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Kidney stones SUCK!!!
Recover. And mend.
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Bunch of dead bodies from mysterious reasons... Very interesting.
Hope you are feeling better soon.
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Ooh, new TU story! I always felt a bit sorry for Commander Fong, so this is cool, and of course it's fun to see Jason, Trev & Blashvor again. Fong is so confused by them! <g> Mai Wing is very interesting, and I'd like to know a lot more about her. And I'm still confused about the title.
Where's the plague? Is it connected to the Skelzir globe beast? I guess they were originally created as a bio-weapon, so that would sort of make sense...
Sorry to hear about the hospitalization, Nan; hope you're doing much better now!
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He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Those Skelzir globes seem pretty dangerous. Who was the dead 'trol with the icy jewelry? What is the significance of it? I'm eagerly awaiting more.
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Dang, there's a lot of those globes around, isn't there? Trev's susceptible because he's a power pack; I wonder if Fong is, too? And that thing sounded like a droma to me... I suspect it'll come in handy. Great stuff, Nan, gimme more! PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
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Everyone stopped, and instantly, Fong heard what had already alerted the sharper ears of his companion. A sound behind them -- an odd, moist, "squish-squish" of large feet, placed softly on the cave floor. The sound continued for perhaps five seconds, and then ceased. It's Gollum!
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Good solid adventure getting out the cave, and some interesting backstory from the camping guy. And Fong needs to get past his bruised feelings and realize that if *he* thinks it could be a problem for a Strike Commander to fall in love with a psychic, then the psychic in question would definitely realize it, too. Jason summed it up -- he's gonna have to choose which is more important, the girl or his job. And considering the job has been steadily killing him, and that if Mai Wing is a trained psychic she might could slide him into the Underground, it seems pretty much like a no brainer. But then, he's not thinking with his brain right now And, um, the plot's good too.  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
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Trevor drew his blaster, flicked the setting to 'kill' and fired twice.
Blashvor spoke directly to Fong. "Their minds were gone, Strike Commander. They were puppets of these globes, existing only to do the will of their masters. They could never be anything else again." Whoa! I didn't recognize the stakes here. I thought if they got far enough away, they'd be OK. But not so. 
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Ooh, zombies! I guess they got eaten by the Skelzir globes. How in the world are they going to sneak poor Fong and Trevor past who knows how many globes at the base without that happening to them, too?
Please post more, soon!
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Showing that Lois Lane was right to take Small Engine Repair in high school instead of Home Ec. I'm sure she'd be able to fix the engines of the Jilectan yacht if she were there. 
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She grinned. "Go and ask Lady Vovinthvill. She'll probably be glad to help you out."
"Yeah -- out of my clothes! No thanks!" He pulled her closer. "I prefer my own species." And I'm wondering about this. Cross-species sex - isn't that a little squicky? Why are the Jils attracted to humans?
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Maybe. Think of Star Trek, however. In any case, the Jils think of humans in a similar light to the Romans or Egyptians and their slaves. My sister and I were trying to create an alien culture that readers could relate to and understand, even if they didn't approve of it. We took elements from various cultures of the past, and some we dreamed up completely from our imaginations. Remember, Jilectans are not humans, and their values are not ours.
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Personally, I think the Jil ladies are bored silly. What else have they got to do, after all?
Good stuff, Nan -- I keep wondering how long it will take for Mai & Fong to realize that they're psychic partners? They'd need to start talking more, I guess, since Fong won't have a clue about Armageddon teams, and Mai doesn't know about Fong's link to her since it's not noticeable on her end. Jason and Trevor certainly know about that type of link but they probably still think it's something Alan did to them. OTOH, Blashvor might recognize the signs.
I tend to read these boards on my work computer and I don't sign in from there, so I can read but not comment. Trust me, I'm following along with this with great interest and enjoyment.
More!
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You're probably right, Pam. Except for the few exceptions like Ladies Tranthzill and Jorexzill, of course.
This is horrible, though! We're almost at the end of Plague!!! Please say you're going to work on the sequel to this ASAP, please?
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I enjoy Lord Blashvor. His response at the end of the chapter ("bad for business") is amusing and it shows how pragmatic he is. He's willing to work with the Terran Underground, make money, and serve himself all at the same time.
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Yes, Lord Blashvor is a refreshing change from the rest of his race <g>
Nan, I was wondering how you'd end this up in just one more chapter, but this makes sense -- give the job to the organization with lots of resources.
So, do we get to see Angie apologize to Fong, next chapter?? <g> She really put him through the wringer...
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This is horrible, though! We're almost at the end of Plague!!! Please say you're going to work on the sequel to this ASAP, please? I'll second that. Janine
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Dang haven't read this since September. Lots to catch up on.
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From part 9. "Queen to king's bishop six. Check Mate, M'Lord." Hahaha. Nicely done. Can't wait to read more. James
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Part 11
Yeah, Fong is finely getting a clue and he is making the right choice.
I am currently reading Jim Butcher's Codex Alera series. There is a species like the Globes called the Vord. Once the take over your body, you die but your body lives on. Nasty things!!
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Please tell me you are working on the next installation!!!
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Wow - been a big fan of Nan's L&C fics for years but just discovered this amazing huge set of stories. Still trying to work out chronology but so far I'm blown away. Loving the whole new world created. Now I just need to tear myself away so I can actually get work done and maybe exercise a bit. Hard to do with so much to be read. Thanks.
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Hi, Andy,
I'm glad you're enjoying the Terran Underground series.
If you'd like to look at the timeline, I refer you to Mr. Data's post above with a link to the Terran Underground timeline in his sig line.
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