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The plot thickens (again). Opinions? Comments? Rotten tomatoes?

Fresh tomatos maybe, definitely nothing rotten.

This is amazing! And I constantly want to read more of it. How much more to go? I'm not sure I can take the suspense much longer.

Nethra

you know how much it hurts to come to the end of each segment? argh

ps the beginning of this section, you got the Jil names all confused, they are all named the same come the second paragraph on <g> choosing names that are similar for family members is all and good, but I did not think that you want identical.

I easily got thru tho and I am curious what the link with Ruffard is and I want to know if Ellie is a translator too, or if it really is Ellie at the edge there.. oh heck MORE!

Marnie, I checked the names. Maybe I missed one, but I don't think so. The only Jil we're dealing with here is Lord Snarthvar. The Jil on the "Peacemaker" who spotted the psychic activity (and was killed when the crew of the "Wolverine" boarded the "Peacemaker") was Lord Snathvor, his cousin. He isn't mentioned after that one paragraph.

Nan

Hmm

And then there is I don't know they are all so simular, its hard to keep track, that might be a problem..?

Oh, I get it. Jils whose fathers are still alive, are always introduced as "son of", as in Lord Snarthvar, son of the noble Snithvor. (The "var" ending, indicates that the father is still alive, vor indicates that father is not alive) Snarthvar is the son of Snithvor and the cousin of Snathvor, but Snarthvar is the only Jil on the planet as of yet.

Nan

This is such a fantastic story!!!!

It borders on edge of incredulity, but you always seem to avoid total disbelief.

So, Steph is Jack's PPP (Psychic Power Pack). You girls must have a strong belief in fated meetings.

Nan, is that why you like Soulmates so much?

James