Okay. Now, this is the third time I've read this part and it already sounds better, clearer than the previous two versions.
She was wearing a smart dress suit in dark burgundy, a short jacket over a dark red silk, scoop neck blouse (which showed off an ample amount of cleavage), a very short burgundy skirt and high heeled pumps in red, which showed off her legs quite nicely.
Herb!
Yes, Uh, I would like to speak with Lois Lane-Kent if you please.”.
Did canon Lois officially take Clark's last name?
We recently purchased the old Delfino mansion out on Wisteria Lane.
What Herb couldn’t see since the door to the kitchen was closed was that after filling the tea pot with water Lois simply looked at it for a few seconds and it started to boil. She was careful to do everything else at normal human speed so that Herb wouldn’t suspect. She projected a thought to Clark /Be careful on how much you say. Remember what Herb 1917 said. “Too much information too soon is not good.”/
(or 3! no, 4! for Clark)? Or since they are old enough they've been let in on the secret? We're the kids at CJ's wedding?
This version is more clear, but it ruins to whole surprise / mystery that young Lois and older Lois are the same person! I love that from the earlier version. It's good to keep the reader guessing. I would take out Lois's & Clark's thoughts / telepathic messages, so that surprise for the reader is still there and the scene remains fully in Wells POV. But maybe that's just me.
Now, I've got to read on to find out what happened to canon Lois. And that tease about alt-Clark!
