Very interesting developments! Looking forward to where you take this.
Just a couple of words I noticed which I think you might want to change:
“Doing what any good reporter would do… saving my story! My bag… where’s my bag?” She tried walking into the living room searching for the item, than stumbled, all her previous bravo drained away.
I believe the word you want is "bravado" instead of "bravo".
Inwardly he sighed; thanking the heavens, she was now safe, the outcome could have been much, much worst .
I believe you need "worse" there.
Hope this is helpful and doesn't seem nitpicky to you.
