“I still don't know how he knew that cheese was missing. I was very careful not to disturb the pepperoni,” Lois said.
“Maybe he has his own superpowers,” Clark suggested as his beeper went off.
That's what I wondered.
“Aren’t we always careful?” Lois asked. Jimmy and Clark just stared at her. “Well, Clark’s careful enough for both of us,” she amended. “We’ll be fine. A quick look around, ask Georgie a few questions, leave. No brainer.”
Clark's careful enough for the both of them. Funny.
“I’ll see what I can find,” Jimmy promised with a shrug. “I wasn’t planning on going home tonight anyway.”
Poor Jimmy. He's such a trooper.
You write very well, both dialogue and description. But sometimes it still feels like I'm just watching the episode. Play up the differences between your story and the show and it'll read even better.
(Oh, by the way, you don't need to include a WHAM warning when the original episode included a similar WHAM.)
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