Eeeeeeee!!! I love it! You did a better job than I did in creating tension, since you pointed out the concern of changing too much in the past, and the issue of having to get even a simple phonecall past the parents. Also, kudos for having a much stronger sense of "when" and "how" without getting too bogged down by it. Excellence!
One nitpick, though: when you're posting, or editing a post, there's a little array of icons near the bottom of the screen. Selected the blue arrow icon generally makes it easier to spot fanfic posts as distinguished from general chatter. That is my only complaint; please write more!
