The concept has merit, but the language was a bit flowery for my taste. I do like Jesse's self-image as a poet.
I had an idea for a story that I can't really see myself fleshing out properly, so I don't think I'll actually write it, and I think it would be hard to do without it falling flat: Dan is actually Mr. Mxyzptlk, and his whole goal is to annoy Superman, which is why he keeps interrupting Clark and Lois.
