I like and it works quite nicely. I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this. I did want to say that I think you did really well with the circumstances you set up. Well before I knew you were writing a sequel, I tried to write my own version of Clark-2 going to get his Lois (with UltraWoman Lois and Primary Earth Clark) and all it did was turn into a battle of epic proportions (the sort of story I'm not fond of and probably wouldn't have read). You at least were able to keep this story to Cold War level and I have to applaud you for fighting to keep it there.
CLARK: No. I'm just worried I'm a jinx.
JONATHAN: A jinx?
CLARK: Yeah. Let's face it, ever since she's known me, Lois's been kidnapped, frozen, pushed off buildings, almost stabbed, poisoned, buried alive and who knows what else, and it's all because of me.
-"Contact" (You're not her jinx, you're her blessing.)
| 
