Definitely still enjoying it, albeit at Lois's expense. Poor Lois! She is now so self-conscious and second-guessing her every move. At least at this point, her extra knowledge seems more like a hindrance than a help to her.
And poor Clark; he must be getting whiplash from all of Lois's about-faces. He's got to be confused by all of the mixed signals Lois is giving him.
I love how you've kept the major beats of the pilot, but have made small (but not minor) tweaks to the dialogue.
Already looking forward to the next part.
Joy,
Lynn
