Great story, Yvonne. Poignant, then funny, and then just sweet. Great flow, too. It really carries you along.
I love how much personality you managed to give Lucy, and the parallels you drew between her and Lois.
I'm also really impressed with the introspection, how you managed to really get into both their heads and show us how the same situation can look from two very different sets of eyes.
Funny how much different a story can be depending on how you approach it, though. Knowing you'd written it, I was reading just for the story, not looking into every little detail of style and diction. Now, I can't tell you at all what looked so familiar to me before.
Anyway, I really liked this one. Got any more like it?
Paul
