interesting... lol, but I wanted to know who that person was and what happaned! That shall remain mystery, I suppose.

Julie

Interesting!

AnnaBtG.

I still find this one a little bit confusing, Marnie, and think that perhaps expanding it or further developing the idea might work a little better.

The idea is good - cute and as others have said, interesting - but, for me at least, the main point you wanted to get over - about our character being accidentally caught in some crossfire between Lois and Superman - isn't brought out clearly enough in this draft.

I think it could be a really cute vignette though - the bones of it are certainly there already.


LabRat

I am glad that some found this interesting as it was, and I think that I have added some things to clarify it a bit more... I don't know, maybe the idea was just not fully formed.

Wow! Okay, that makes a lot more sense. Poor guy, getting caught in the middle. It makes me wonder, though.. Why is a dentist helping Superman out? Does this thing happen often?

Great story!

ROTFL!

Pity it wasn't Lex luthor, after all!

I really enjoyed this, Bumpkin. It has the potential of growing into a nice short story. So how about it, hmm?

Ursie