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Posted By: woody FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/10/08 09:31 PM
Great part. Poor little kid flying across universe and ending up with a self proscribed domestic wreck. Not to say Lois doesn't have motherly inctincts. But Lois raising Superman? He wouldn't hesitate to break into anywhere.

As for the end, Whoa. Just think of it, "Hey, Mom." "Hi Clark." "Well, Mom, I had a surprise when I got to work today." "What?" "Lois knows I'm Superman." "How did she find out?" "I told her." "How is it a surprise, then?" "Well, that's part of the other surprise..."
Posted By: Terry Leatherwood Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/10/08 10:41 PM
Mercy, this is an interesting story so far. But you've set up an unresolvable contradiction with Clark meeting little Kal. How could Clark meet himself at age four and not have it deeply impact his life? And wouldn't that give young Clark more information about his future than he's supposed to have, assuming he remembers and understands much of it? He seems to be a very smart and very perceptive boy.

Unless, of course, we've got two different timelines going on. Or unless little Kal is destined to go back to Kansas just an instant after Tempus grabbed him, and because he wasn't gone very long Jonathan and Martha didn't realize he'd taken such an interesting trip.

And that could set up the reason Clark fell in love with Lois as soon as he saw her. He'd already met her and learned how wonderful her heart really was, because she'd taken such good care of him when he was only four.

I wonder what Lois will tell Henderson. And I wonder if Tempus knows it was Lois who clocked him, and I also wonder just how badly he's hurt. Luthor's in a coma, and Tempus probably has a pretty serious concussion, an injury which may be exacerbated by time travel. He could have a seizure at any moment. What a loss that would be!

I'm looking forward to the next part, Mercy. And I plan to read it as soon as I see it.
Posted By: cp33 Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/11/08 04:23 AM
I am curious myself how Clark is going to react to Kal. Funny how Kal knows he is Clark.

Looking forward to more
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/12/08 09:00 AM
Luther and coma in the same sentence. party
And Tempus probably enjoyed having a violent experience. Ok, maybe not since he was on the receiving end laugh

You Lois. Me Clark. lol

Good stuff.

Through, I doubt Kal-El meant the he is Clark with that last sentence.

Michael
Posted By: Queen of the Capes Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/16/08 07:42 AM
Oh, I think that's exactly what he meant. evil

Oh, and hey, author! It's mah birthday and I demand more The Kid! wildguy
Posted By: gr8shadesofElvis Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/16/08 07:57 AM
Me too. I thought you'd pretty much finished this. No excuses for tardiness. wink
Posted By: Sira Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/17/08 08:47 AM
Yup. I am pretty intrigued by this piece of fiction myself. This has so much potential for what I love most about LnC: revelation angst, drama and so on.
(I even do like humorous and funny revelation takes, so...)

... please do not forget about us and keep feeding us these well written little pieces.

~Sira.
Posted By: BJ Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/17/08 09:27 AM
Eep! Sorry, I thought I'd left feedback for this chapter already.

Loved it. Young Kal-El is so cute and the ending of this chapter was a great cliffhanger. How long before the great mind of Lois Lane puts things together when a 4-year old Kal-El starts referring to himself as "Clark"? The lunkhead is in serious trouble now.

BJ
Posted By: Mercy Re: FDK: The Kid 3/13 or Poor Kal - 01/17/08 08:19 PM
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Great part. Poor little kid flying across universe and ending up with a self proscribed domestic wreck. Not to say Lois doesn't have motherly inctincts. But Lois raising Superman? He wouldn't hesitate to break into anywhere.
He he--you know, I think you're right.

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Mercy, this is an interesting story so far. But you've set up an unresolvable contradiction with Clark meeting little Kal. How could Clark meet himself at age four and not have it deeply impact his life? And wouldn't that give young Clark more information about his future than he's supposed to have, assuming he remembers and understands much of it? He seems to be a very smart and very perceptive boy.
You're right. There's bound to be consequences for little Clark turning up in the future. Lois begins to question what they may be in the next part, and that's one of the themes that gets explored more later on.

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I am curious myself how Clark is going to react to Kal. Funny how Kal knows he is Clark.
Sometimes I wonder what it would be like to run into younger me or older me. At what age would I really realize it was me? Would I recognize myself as an old woman? As a little kid? What would younger me think of 'now' me? I think these ponderings definitely fueled my motivation for writing this story.

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Luther and coma in the same sentence.
Yeah, I've been wanting to give 'im a good whack for a while. Yay for finally getting the chance!

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And Tempus probably enjoyed having a violent experience. Ok, maybe not since he was on the receiving end
I suppose that wasn't quite what he bargained for when he sought to destroy Utopia. evil

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Oh, and hey, author! It's mah birthday and I demand more The Kid!
Happy belated birthday!! party And part 4 is up!

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Me too. I thought you'd pretty much finished this. No excuses for tardiness.
*ducks head in shame*

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Yup. I am pretty intrigued by this piece of fiction myself. This has so much potential for what I love most about LnC: revelation angst, drama and so on.
(I even do like humorous and funny revelation takes, so...)
Glad you like it!

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Loved it. Young Kal-El is so cute and the ending of this chapter was a great cliffhanger. How long before the great mind of Lois Lane puts things together when a 4-year old Kal-El starts referring to himself as "Clark"? The lunkhead is in serious trouble now.
Yeah he is! I think both Lois and Clark are in for some shockers. devil
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