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Posted By: gr8shadesofElvis The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/08/07 01:47 PM
The Feedback:

The story was short and sweet. She read all the words.

There were not many. She did not need to look any up.

It was not "too" bad like the author feared.

She even thought about writing one herself.

Then she decided against it, because it was far too difficult to limit herself to simple words of only one or two syllables.

The End.
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Posted By: Mercy Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/08/07 05:12 PM
Oh my. One both parents and children can enjoy. The deep, multi-level allusions and allegory and... smut!

He he, loved it. Tell us another! Tell us another! I'm not tired! smile1
Posted By: Anonymous Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/08/07 06:20 PM
The easy reader stories are really cute. Lois and Clark for the 1st and 2nd graders. smile I like that.
Posted By: Queen of the Capes Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/08/07 08:16 PM
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Originally posted by Mercy:
Oh my. One both parents and children can enjoy. The deep, multi-level allusions and allegory and... smut!

He he, loved it. Tell us another! Tell us another! I'm not tired! smile1
Hee. laugh Glad you like it. I was afraid of two things happening:
One, that nobody would get it,
or Two,that they would get it and I would promptly be banned from the boards. goofy )

Thanks for the FDK, you guys. I'm glad you liked it and did not kill me. smile

...

Please don't kill me. grovel
Posted By: TOC Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/08/07 08:50 PM
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There was a lot to eat at the picnic! Lois ate a big banana. Clark ate a small cherry.
Oooooohhh!!!! Why do I see this absolutely adorable nfic scene in my mind? drool

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The picnic was a lot of fun! But then, it began to rain. Lois and Clark got all wet!
Come, rain, come, eh?

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Lois and Clark were not sad. They had fun! And they can picnic again tomorrow.
We hope so!!! rotflol )

Adorable, Mary!!!

Ann

P.S. Eh... did I tell you the story about Little Red Riding Hood, Mary? Or Snow White? laugh
Posted By: Elisabeth Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/09/07 07:59 AM
I haven't read it, yet, (I'm supposed to be teaching school right now, but I'm just sitting back and watching the kids work) but this is too funny. There were 2 responses to the Easy Reader Challenge in the challenge forum. I told the girls there were 2 stories written for them. They wanted to read it right away, but it was too cramped to read where we were--unless all 3 girls wanted to sit on my lap. It took us an inordinately long time to walk upstairs to where my laptop was.

When I finally caught up with the girls, my 5 yr-old was already looking through the list on the Fanfic page.

"I found the ones I can read!" she told me, very excitedly. "Sin and The Picnic."

I thought that was a hoot. Who would write a story named "Sin" for a kindergartener? Now I think its even funnier, knowing The Picnic was an easy reader. I can't wait to read them both!

Elisabeth
Posted By: Queen of the Capes Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/09/07 04:05 PM
I can see it now:

"Mommy? Why are all the grownups laughing so hard and making funny faces?" evil
Posted By: TicAndToc Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/12/07 06:18 PM
Naughty, naughty!! (But clever!)

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'Toc
Posted By: Kryptic Re: The Picnic: The Feedback - 10/18/07 08:28 PM
tsk, tsk, tsk!

so (secretly) naughty!

sometimes, it's good to be a grown up.
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