I'm grateful for any comment you might want to
make!

Oooh, this is *good* Seems like very plausible actions on both their parts, especially Clark. So now, he knows Lois loves him but she doesn't know he's right there... I wonder where they'll end up?

Your English is very good, btw. There were a few bits I noticed sounded a little "off" but they were very minor and didn't stop me from enjoying the story. I liked the pictures, too; they all fit the text very well.

Post the next part! <g>

PJ

I enjoyed this! Please hurry and post the other three parts - we know you have them, and holding parts back is *not* allowed...

Melisma (under her Rock, conjuring up the wildguy)

Yay Christiane!! You're posting! And I know people are going to love this.

The pictures are great.

I love it! The pictures are so great . They really add to the story.

- Alicia

Just when you think that there can't be a fresh rewrite of TOGoM, someone comes along and proves you wrong.

Good beginning. It's great to see Lois letting it all out. I think we've all come to believe (mostly through all the TOGoM rewrites) that Lois was much more devastated by Clark's supposed death than the show allowed her to be.

Looking forward to more.

Tank the Retired (who wonders if there'll ever be an end to TOGoM rewrites... Nah!)

Wow! Another Togom rewrite. And what a clever title. And with piccies... great!

You've made a very nice change to the plot. It's heartwrenching to see Lois so desperate and alone.

You really stopped at a wrong moment. I wanna know how this continues... MORE!!! And what about your posting schedule??

Saskia

How fitting that She of the screengrab website include pictures in a fic.

That is such a powerful image there! Really well done.

It's amazing how many twists can be made of TOGOM. I really like how you interpret the character's actions on screen, and this Clark is a lot more level-headed than the one in the show! Looking forward to more.

Hazel

Melisma (sneaking back under her Rock before she can get smacked...)

Nice little opener, Christiane. Very emotive.

I have to confess that I'm not a fan of illustrated fic - the photos just distract me from the text and irritate me. <g> But I know I'm in the minority there, so that's my problem. Besides, that's what the Archive is for. Between here and there all tastes are catered for. <g>

<snuffle>

Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

LabRat

This is really good Christine! Lois’ misery and loss is done very well and its heartbreaking to see her so sad.

More Soon

Sarah-Jayne

Labby, usually I'm with you on not really caring for pictures -- when I see the picture, I remember the episode, and since it rarely matches the fic, that jars me out of the story... but these matched pretty darned well

Anyway, I want more!

PJ

Christiane

A wonderful start!

I'm looking forward to reading the next part.

Tricia

A really nice start, Christiane! I like that Clark isn't "wallowing" in self-pity, but that he immediately tries to make sense of what has just happened, and that amongst his first thoughts is to make sure that Lois is safe.

And although Clark is overjoyed to know that Lois loves "Clark", it will certainly be a rocky road between here and what is probably a happy end to the story, because when Lois finds out that Clark=Superman and that she confessed her love of "Clark" to "Superman" and that he lied to her...

Kathy

Wow, Christiane

Ren

Christiane,
well done
wonderful first part
keep it coming
merry

AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH more soon! this is great! Laura