Okay, it's always bothered me that Lois was such a prize bitch during the Pilot, because that's not how I want to think of her. So you bet I was happy to see Lois like this:

Wow!!!! Lois knows about Clark already, and she has already tried to persuade Perry to hire him!!! She thinks he is a brilliant reporter, and she is not afraid to say so to Perry, and in front of Clark himself! And she acknowledges to herself that he is the most gorgeous man she has ever seen! I love it!!!!

But hey, what's this?

Clark doesn't notice Lois's looks at all. He knows of her as a reporter and thinks that she is "not bad", but "definitely not his caliber". He thinks that if someone as unimpressive as her is working for the Daily Planet, then there is certainly no reason that he shouldn't work there, too!

Clark is being a - well, an idiot, I think! Okay, he is behaving better than Lois did in the Pilot, at least. But he needs to be taught a lesson. He needs to understand that Lois is fantastic! Adorable! Gorgeous! A fabulous reporter! Nancy, are you planning to make these facts penetrate this thick-headed doofus' brain? Are you going to show us Clark falling in love with Lois? Because if you are, I definitely want to read more of this!

Ann

Thank you, Ann!!!

Yes, definitely, that would be my plan. But the title is Twisted. So I definitely
'twisted' things up a little.

Keep posting!! You can't leave us here!

Jose

So is it Lois falling for Clark without him noticing it???

Hurry back with more.

Hi Nancy,

What can I say but BRILLIANT!

Its good to have two different stories going through the Fan fic,

This pilot could be the perfect prequel to A New Hero. (As one of your big fans of that story!)

I don't say that things won't be tortuous and Lois could even forget her initial raves - to make it an even more "twisted"?

Looking forward to much more.

Regards,

Stuart

Please, I am a diabetic, that much sugar could kill me.

Nice start but Lois is way too sweet. How about having her know who he is and do the same thing on a lower key.

Kent, she knew that name, hmmm, she held out her hand,
"Clippings?"
"Ah, yes" he replied handing the file to her.

"Hmmm" she opened it and leafed through it.
She smiled, "Ahh" as she pulled a sheet out and handed it to Perry.
"Always lead with your best Kent"

I certainly like the fact that in this twist, it's Lois who falls for Clark while it's Clark who is oblivious to her. Makes for a very different set of problems which are at least equally interesting as the original.

Oh yeah, definitely continue! I'm loving this angle.

Well, well, well! Twisted is right. Nancy, definitely continue it!

Well, I'm pretty excited about all this feedback.

I'd like to thank daneel, bakasi, SNL, Olympe, Sheila, Mrs. Mosley, and Framework 4.

Okay, Patrick, you wanted me to change this to:

But the title is Twisted. I think this would basically be putting the pilot right back to where the pilot was in the first place.

If she had said Kent was the most gorgeous man she'd ever seen, then yes, that would have been way over the top. But she thought it. Do you think we women don't notice gorgeous guys? We do. I'm reminded of a tongue in cheek song that I believe is called Size Doesn't Matter. And hey, even Lois noticed in the beginnings of the show. She just tried to talk herself out of believing that she thought that.

And Lois was always passionate about good writing. Or at least I saw it that way. She is more excited about the good writing.

Since I'd gotten some private feedback, I'd already decided to continue with the story, and we do have some similar ideas in that Lois will tell him he almost blew it because 'He didn't lead with his best'. That wasn't my wording, but heck, but I might use that bit of your suggestion.

And lastly, I wonder if some of this 'really no change in the pilot' stuff came from something I did in A New Hero that caused you to stop reading? I do wish you'd come back. The next chapter (Chapter 36) will begin to resolve the issue that upset you so. I think you might like it.

Expect more Twists. Maybe a date with Cat? (Only a date.)

I was just thinking what effect this kind of beginning would have on the towel scene (nine..naked) in the Pilot. Please do something with that.

Would the Clark Classicalla portrays actually open the door in only a towel?

Just a question.

Oh, yes, Classicalla's Clark would definitely open the door in a towel... Maybe he'll even drop it...

Hmmm, Nancy's Lois doesn't need to fall much harder for Clark than she already has, but... well, the dropped towel is always a good idea. Maybe Lois will pick it up for him?

Ann

I don't know how I missed this vignette when you first posted, but I'm so glad I saw it!

I really, really like how you've taken the pilot and turned it on its head. Especially — and I know this bit has already been quoted twice, but I love love *love* it, so I have to re-post it — here:
Hah! Such a terrific (pardon the pun) twist! I can't wait to read the next part.

Dropping the towel?
Go for it! I want to read about that! Make it nfic, please.

Thanks, guys. Yes, maybe Lois will pick that towel up for him.

But first up, another chapter of A New Hero. I'm going to post that soon.

Great start! I like how you twisted things around, very nice idea!

well, duh. of course we want more! ...so you hurry up, ok? hehehe!

Thanks, Lara!!

Yes, I do intend on continuing. But my new job is going to have me traveling, and at first I'll be computerless (except for my Palm Pilot), so it will be slow going.

Hi Nancy!

Sorry I'm late to the party.

Very, very twisted. I like it - and yes, definitely continue... although I doubt my vote does much since I was really too late to cast it <bad DJ bad>

Thanks, DJ!!