I'd love to know what you all think, as I venture into this new world of L&C fanfic! Thanks for reading!

Nice start, SarahC. Looking forward to your next post.

You know, Sarah, I always wondered why Lois didn't see the suit if Mayson, who was in the last moments of her life, could. I understand that Lois was in shock and that she didn't hear what Mayson said to Clark, but I always wondered what he did to cover up the big 'S' on his chest.

Lois's reaction was so very in character, from the shock of learning the truth to the slap to her insistence that they take some time apart from one another. You've nailed Clark's pain, too. I wonder if she'll be able to trust him now. I understand and respect his reasons for not telling her, but I also understand Lois's sense of betrayal. He's hidden something incredibly important from her for almost the entire time they've known each other, and it's not going to be easy to get past this (assuming, of course, that they actually do get past this).

This really is a nice beginning. You're some kind of wonderful writer if you can finish this in just one more chapter. I'm looking forward to the next post, because this is going to be a doozy.

Sarah... this is your first story?

Wow! Wonderful. Beautiful. Welcome to the boards.

I loved the story. The emotions you invoked. I too understood Lois' pain and feelings of betrayal and yet her desire to not want to hurt him. To be angry at him and feel bad for him at the same time.

And then Clark's feelings. Very nice. How it felt like someone was reaching into his chest and squeezing his heart.

I look forward to the next part!

Oh, and you might want to pick the "blue arrow" for a message icon. Most authors use that as kind of a "flag" to catch the reader's attention to a story post. If you leave the icon as the little yellow note, the story can get lost in among the fdk threads.

Thanks Sarah!

Oh Sara I really like this version of this ep. What a good twist on things. I don't blame Lois but it does sound hopeful at least. Laura

I'm not giving you feedback until you post the next part! {lips pouty}

Hi,

Great piece.

SarahC, I just want you to know that I've read this story and I've really, really liked it! I loved it, in fact. I hope I'll have time to post some more feedback later, but right now I don't have that time.

Great to see you here with this very fine new story! Welcome to the boards, and I hope this story won't be your last one!

Ann

Excellent start to this story!

Happily on my way to read part 2.

I just want to say one more thing about part one. I thought it was sheer genius to show how Clark would be shocked at Mayson's death, but he would be devastated at the thought of losing Lois. And yes, I really think that if Mayson saw the 'S' shield under Clark's shirt, Lois should have, too.

Ann