Comments -- Behind the Mist - 07/15/03 12:33 AM
Very nice, daneel. The story could do with a little editing just to polish it up, but it's a very good piece of work as it stands. Well done.
The polishing I mention has mostly to do with the finer points of English idiom; I'm guessing, given your location, that English is not your native language and, if so, it only makes your work the more impressive. And there's not that much to do; give a decent BR/editor half an hour on this and it would shine even more than it does.
I do hope there's a sequel. I want to see Lucy deal with having Clark/Superman as her sister's boyfriend.
Phil
The polishing I mention has mostly to do with the finer points of English idiom; I'm guessing, given your location, that English is not your native language and, if so, it only makes your work the more impressive. And there's not that much to do; give a decent BR/editor half an hour on this and it would shine even more than it does.
I do hope there's a sequel. I want to see Lucy deal with having Clark/Superman as her sister's boyfriend.
Phil