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DAMMIT DAVE!!!

::Mara bursts into tears::

Why'd you have to go and write such a beautiful, heart wrenching, one piece?! Huh?! Why? Why do you insist on making me cry, on reaching to the heart of the LnC love and showing it to everyone and then squishing it so cruelly. That was so beautiful!

::sobs and turns away::


There's a fine line between love and hate, Dave, and you're making me walk it with every piece you write. ::sniffles::

I LOVED this story.

It was absolutly beautiful.

simply, heart breakingly, beautiful.

FinLi

Oh, so beautiful!!

*hugs Clark*

Very nice. Good job!

See ya,
AnnaBtG.

So sad, but so beautiful, Dave! You've definitely still got it. Still know now to get our hearts all wrung out with just a few words.

One tiny typo:
Think you mean 'lodged'.

Love this!


Wendy

...David...

Sequel.

Now.

::shakes fist::

I'm probably not the right person to comment on this, David. But I really, really want to thank you for your serious wham warning.

Second - yes, I did read it, and while it made me really sad, it didn't shatter me, if you can tell the difference. I still felt that Clark might survive this, so it wasn't a complete, no-hope-for-the-future deathfic.

I guess this sort of story will never be one of my favorites... but it was beautifully written, as always. And I guess that, once again, I just wanted to thank you for your very serious wham warning, and for writing this story so that it still leaves us with some little hope for the future!

Ann

Will be back to reply to comments in a bit, but just quickly...

Thanks, Wendy! Right on it.

Now, see? That's what I call fantastic deathfic. I haven't read one that struck such an emotional chord since I read Dust Devil's 'Beautiful Day' over in the Stargate fandom. Poignant, not maudlin and just beautifully written.

Superb, Dave! Thanks for sharing.

LabRat

Very nice, Dave, but you forgot to post the next bit.

What do you mean, 'what next bit?'

Do I have to spell it out?

Oh, really! Okay, if you insist...

You know, the part where she nurses him back to health?

Yvonne
(seriously, this was lovely )

Nice piece I love feeling emotion and not just 'reading'.

I too fancy this part.

I tried to fool my brain in not seeing the wham warning though. Oh well, I guess we are not using the wham warning thread now. I'll try and not keep my eyes peeled for it I'm going to print it off, minus the wham, and keep it in my fav binder and when I read it again I should have forgotten My husband laughs I need to get a fire proof box for my beloved binder.

I still love that word - wham. I think it would have been appropraite at work today!

The WHAM warning thread has never been compulsory, SuperRoo. It's simply one option authors can use if they choose to. Some authors will use it, some will prefer to put a WHAM warning at the head of their story, others will choose not to put in a warning at all. The choice as to which it is is entirely the author's.

LabRat

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Noo...

Beautifully written. This very painful vignette (and that last line in particular) is going to stay in my mind long after I've read it...

I'll add to the chorus of comments from before: Where, oh, where is the sequel?

David, I didn't read this fic because you made the wham warning so clear, and reading the comments, that was obviously the right choice for me. Thank you.

oh well - thanks

Oh... Oh, Dave!! I heart you!!!!!!! You can see her worry, her fears...

THANK YOU for writing this! I love it!!!

~NICOLE

/me can't speak as she wipes the tears from her eyes, then swallows hard.

Wow. You made me cry. I used to *never* cry for books or fanfic. But thanks to FoLC writers like you (and Sorcha and Wendy and Sara), I seem to be rediscovering the way to cry. Read a *really* sad L&C fic. Like this one. And so *short* too! You hold a record there--no 400 kb buildup to a teary ending necessary for you. Just a powerful whammy super short.

Keep up your writing, 'kay? Just . . . try to write more happy fics? I don't think I can take too much of this weeping stuff.

I'll be back to reply to comments properly tomorrow night since I have an exam tomorrow (ick ). But, just quickly...

Thank you to everyone who left a comment. To everyone who let me know how this made them feel. Even those who just commented to let me know they couldn't read it... thank you all. I really was expecting to be run off... And I'm sorry I'm making some of you walk a fine line.

The sequel some of you were clamouring for will be up in a few moments. Just remember... you asked for it...

Dave

Yep. Someone says Deathfic and I'm in. Shocked? You shouldn't be. This was sad. One of the saddest pieces of fanfic I've read. But wonderfully written.

Jenny
(I act like I've read alot of fan fic huh?)

I needed angsty deathfic today. Thanks. Between this and the sequel, it was just what the doctor ordered without having to outright ask for it.

But, oh please please post an alternate sequel where Clark actually survives GGGOH?

*pauses furious study of muscle attachments and looks up...*

You have an alternate sequel where Clark survives. You don't need me to tell you that story, you've already heard it.

Dave (who really will be back to reply to comments properly later... he hopes...)

</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Dave7:
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</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Juliet:
<strong> But, oh please please post an alternate sequel where Clark actually survives GGGOH?

Okay, I'm back... a little later than expected, but... <g>

Is it bad that I laughed at that?

Thank you for your comments though, youd fdk always puts a smile on my face.

/me blows on the smoking tip and reholsters his pencil...

Seriously though, thank you, and again, thank you for pointing out the error. (The error I forgot to change in the main file when I sent it off to the archive... )

Wow. Thank you!

Single-handedly while rearing three children on a farm stead in a fledging country town... oh wait. D'oh! That was Dr. Quinn...

I think that's one of the nicest compliments I've ever gotten about my writing. Thank you.

And also:

Sorry 'bout that. <g> I didn't think the thread would be appropriate for a short, one page fic.

Wow.

That last line was one of my favourites too... and one of the reasons I decided to leave the ending ambigious... I couldn't bring myself to part with it. <g>

I'm tempted to quote... oh... everything you said, but I'll contain myself to saying... You're very, very welcome, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Yes, ma'am. And thank you for letting me know how this made you feel.

Very. <g> But thanks for the comments, Jen.

And finally...

Yes, I did. <g> But my answer is still the same... And, much as I love the story of Lois and Clark together... I'm loathe to write an alternate sequel.

If you really want to see one, you - or anybody else willing to take up the task, are welcome to write one.

And again, thank you to everyone for commenting.

Dave

Watch it. I might just take you up on that challenge.