This is definitely intriguing. But the segments are too short.

Is Martha excited because she wants to be a part of Jon's life? When will Rachel/Martha/Jonathan tell Lois that Clark is Superman? Please...don't keep us hanging on too long!

I don't get Rachel. Why would she be surprised that Lois so strongly beleives Superman is dead? After 10 years? Rachel seems the one not realisitic here.

> Why would she be surprised that
> Lois so strongly beleives Superman is dead?

Very good point. I'll have to rewrite that and either drop it completely or move the comment to another time when it makes more sense.

Hi,

Great part.

Where are you?

Why is this post called Aftermath 4 & 5??? I thought it was only written up to Part 4 so far??

Part Five
http://www.lcficmbs.com/ubb/ultimatebb.php?ubb=get_topic;f=1;t=004978

This is good, and I'm really interested, but it's a choppy read with such short parts being posted so far apart. It's hard for me to get really invested in the story; which is a real shame, because it's a totally worthy story. Please don't think that my waiting to read it from the archive means I am not interested; I am *very* interested; enough so that I want to read it right. You are doing a good job. I look forward to reading the rest.