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Let me know what you think! (This makes three vignettes in two days. I'm sort of pleased.)

You know... that would be embarrasing...

Jose

Aww! That was cute. I would be entirely embarrassed if something like that happened to me. Poor kid!

Hah! There were things here that I absolutely loved! This, for example:

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I've started to come into powers of my own, and it still horrifies me a little that I've started being able to see what my father does when he spins into his suit.

It's an image I've been trying to get out of my mind for a while now, though it seems to be indelibly burned into my retina.

Ouch! Squirm! Shudder! The pictures you put into my mind with this, Shayne!

And involutarily X-raying the pensioners at a nursing home could easily be traumatic for a young kid too, even though we ought to learn and accept that the perfect bodies we see on TV all the time are in no way the norm of what human bodies usually look like, and we should view each other's bodies with more tolerance and acceptance (insert stern schoolteacher look here....)

But.... Hey! Being in love with a girl, and seeing that this girl has a portrait of one's own father hanging on her wall.... Well, that would be enough to give anybody and everybody an inferiority complex! Poor, poor boy!

But I love the way this vignette ends. Superman's son has so many reasons to be embarrassed. But his parents have given him a most wonderful gift, too: the example of their own lives, and, from that, the reason to hope:

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Maybe I lied a little about her being my girlfriend. She's just my study partner. But if I've learned anything from my parents, it's that things can change if you work hard enough.

If I have to put up with a little humiliation on the way, well, so be it.

Ah, Shayne. Lovely! And you've written three vignettes in two days. Wow, that's fantastic!

Ann

LOL, Shayne, what the heck are you feeding that Muse?

This one is very cute and funny - and I love the ending with that little nugget of something blossoming.

Perfect.

LabRat

Hi,

Cute!

Ooh. When you started storming last night, I wasn't sure what would come of it (other than my giggles). But you've written a wonderful piece! I love the inferiority complex that the kid has ... and yet, he still has hope because of the example. This is great!

Wow, Shayne!

This is another great vignette.

Congratulations on another excellent vignette.

I enjoyed it immensely.

Tricia

Very nice story, Shayne! Well done!

See ya,
AnnaBtG.

Very cute Shayne!

Jackie

Loved how you took us from funny (father in underwear) to embarrassing (his girlfriend fantasizing about his father) to sweet (waiting for a possible romance just like they did).

Also liked the part about Lois being not super, but hard to live up too as well.

It's tough being a kid!