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What do you think? I wrote something under 1000 words! YAY

I love it! Poor Lois, falling into the same patterns she knew from her childhood...but so glad she has Clark to rescue her!

Originally Posted by Queen of the Capes

I love it! Poor Lois, falling into the same patterns she knew from her childhood...but so glad she has Clark to rescue her!

Yeah it's so easy to fall into the patterns of our parents. Thanks!

It’s SOOOOOOO sad but SOOOO perfect!!

Well, and of course a happy ending!! But I was so tense and sad for like… SO MANY WORDS!

Originally Posted by KSaraSara

It’s SOOOOOOO sad but SOOOO perfect!!

Well, and of course a happy ending!! But I was so tense and sad for like… SO MANY WORDS!

Ha ha! Not THAT many words, cause it's only 981 lol

Welp, I need some tissues.

The emotion was amazing. So much crammed in such few words. Glad Lois is able to finally realize she can leave the Lane traditions behind. She has her own family now.

Originally Posted by Blueowl

Welp, I need some tissues.

The emotion was amazing. So much crammed in such few words. Glad Lois is able to finally realize she can leave the Lane traditions behind. She has her own family now.

It was quite a challenge to try to get the story to fit under 1000 words. I had to cut quite a bit. Thanks!!

Love, love, love what you did with this! Lois's reflection on how she's acting like her mother, perceiving her daughter's reactions as she does, and then the conclusion--perfect!

Is this short story challenge week??

-Bek

Beautifully done. I love that Lois is able to recognize how her past was affecting her and then trying to move on.

Originally Posted by SuperBek

Love, love, love what you did with this! Lois's reflection on how she's acting like her mother, perceiving her daughter's reactions as she does, and then the conclusion--perfect!

Is this short story challenge week??

-Bek

Thank you! I wanted to focus on the way we process how our childhood affects us and the way we try to fix it as parents. Don't know if it's an official challenge week or people just jumping on the bandwagon but it's great!!

Heart-wrenchingly sweet. Thank you for sharing.

Hi lovetvfan!

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This was a bit of a challenge as most of my stories are 20 000 words or longer so writing something under 1000 words was difficult.

We may gave discussed a support group back in the day. I’m sure Sara would love to join, too.

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Set in the future, Lois attempts to untangle Christmas lights for the tree. Clark and the kids offer to help, but Lois is determined. After all, it’s her job to put up the lights. It’s a Lane family tradition.

Oh boy.
TEMPUS: /hides nylon thread and crazy glue/ The chance to finally win against Lois has never been greater.

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And every year she found herself using language she never used otherwise in front of Audrey and Rose, their two girls, now aged 5 and 7, as she desperately tried to straighten out the Christmas tree lights.

Awww, the lil ones will learn to only curse at Christmas!

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"I would point out, honey, that I did offer to help you.”

They shape up to be most adorable.

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This was supposed to be fun, wasn’t it?

*Ding*
Just a sec, I think my popcorn’s ready.

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“Can I do the honours?” Clark asked, and she couldn’t help but notice the hesitancy in his voice.

He doesn’t die when electrocuted.

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“The fuse must be blown,” Lois muttered.

I have a new DFCB here if you need to jam in a replacement fuse.

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“Daddy was just trying to help, Mommy,” Rose said softly. And there it was. That tone. Lois knew that tone. Had grown up with that tone. That tone spoke of walking on eggshells. Of tempers flaring, wine glasses and spilled merlot.

Oh boy

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“Maybe we could put them up as a family. Maybe we could make our own tradition.”

Sounds reasonable.

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“A new tradition. Sounds perfect.” End

Lois still has a bit of learning to do, I gather. The others are correct, it’s a strong mixture of fun and sadness. Well crafted

Michael

Wonderfully written! Started out funny, then it became heart-wrenching as Lois's frustration grew!

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“No, I have to put them up,” she insisted, not even certain why it mattered anymore.

I love this line!

Great work, Sara, thanks for sharing!

Originally Posted by scifiJoan

Beautifully done. I love that Lois is able to recognize how her past was affecting her and then trying to move on.

Thank you! It was hard to write something this short so I am glad it worked!

Originally Posted by Toomi8

Heart-wrenchingly sweet. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you for reading!

Originally Posted by Darth Michael

Hi lovetvfan!

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This was a bit of a challenge as most of my stories are 20 000 words or longer so writing something under 1000 words was difficult.

We may gave discussed a support group back in the day. I’m sure Sara would love to join, too.

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Set in the future, Lois attempts to untangle Christmas lights for the tree. Clark and the kids offer to help, but Lois is determined. After all, it’s her job to put up the lights. It’s a Lane family tradition.

Oh boy.
TEMPUS: /hides nylon thread and crazy glue/ The chance to finally win against Lois has never been greater.

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And every year she found herself using language she never used otherwise in front of Audrey and Rose, their two girls, now aged 5 and 7, as she desperately tried to straighten out the Christmas tree lights.

Awww, the lil ones will learn to only curse at Christmas!

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"I would point out, honey, that I did offer to help you.”

They shape up to be most adorable.

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This was supposed to be fun, wasn’t it?

*Ding*
Just a sec, I think my popcorn’s ready.

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“Can I do the honours?” Clark asked, and she couldn’t help but notice the hesitancy in his voice.

He doesn’t die when electrocuted.

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“The fuse must be blown,” Lois muttered.

I have a new DFCB here if you need to jam in a replacement fuse.

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“Daddy was just trying to help, Mommy,” Rose said softly. And there it was. That tone. Lois knew that tone. Had grown up with that tone. That tone spoke of walking on eggshells. Of tempers flaring, wine glasses and spilled merlot.

Oh boy

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“Maybe we could put them up as a family. Maybe we could make our own tradition.”

Sounds reasonable.

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“A new tradition. Sounds perfect.” End

Lois still has a bit of learning to do, I gather. The others are correct, it’s a strong mixture of fun and sadness. Well crafted

Michael

Oh wow, thank you for such wonderful detailed feedback! I appreciate you taking the time! Thank you!

Originally Posted by Anna B. the Greek

Wonderfully written! Started out funny, then it became heart-wrenching as Lois's frustration grew!

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“No, I have to put them up,” she insisted, not even certain why it mattered anymore.

I love this line!

Great work, Sara, thanks for sharing!

Oh wow, thank you! I have a lot of trouble with short stories and you are so good at them so I appreciate it!