FDK:Have a Little Faith in Me - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Hi,

Beautiful story!

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Lois put her hand on Clark’s cheek as a tear fell from her eye, “Clark, I love you with all my heart.” In that instant Clark pulled Lois closer to him and pulled her into a passionate kiss as he threw the divorce papers in the fireplace, within seconds they are consumed by the fire never to be brought up again.

Beautiful!

that was an wonderful and well written story. i enjoyed every bit of it. i haven't cried that much since reading too much is never enough.

? is there anothor story about lois losing an baby?

Terrific story!

Interesting dilemma that Lois and Clark have to work through. Each takes a different view of a shared tragedy.

One part that made reading this difficult was the switching of the tenses in the narrative. You began in the present tense and then throughout switched back and forth to the past tense. You must stick to one tense.

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Lois stared at the ceiling as tears start to stream down her face, “I can’t.”
“Can’t or won’t?” Clark hisses as he fixes his tie in the mirror.

Generally, most fiction written in the third person pov is in the past tense otherwise as a writer you have to be very conscious of time.

This all comes with practice.

gerry

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is there anothor story about lois losing an baby?

There is Valley of the Shadow by Carol M. It's a poignant story. This is the sequel to her other story First Night

Andreia