Oh, Wendy...I can tell that this one is gonna be great! Who cares how long...the longer the better

Why not just go ahead and post the other 10 parts that are ready so we're not left to agonize.

More, soon, Please!!

I'm with Sheila on all points!

Especially the one about posting more . . .

Oh, evil! What a dreadful way to leave me, and going into a work week no less. Clark agonizing in the hospital. Lois with only 24 hours to live. A madman on the loose. How do you expect me to sleep?

I am trying to remember. Do you kill your characters off? I hope not!

Wendy get back here! My only question is what is your posting schedule going to be? Please say at *least* twice a week?

Oh this is EVIL! Amazing, but EVIL! How can you leave us hanging like this????? I'm with the others on the 'longer the better' philosophy....please post again soon....pretty please with sugar on top?

24 hours to live?

Are you sure this doesn't belong in the nFic folder?

Seriously, Wendy - this is great!

I'm still sitting on the edge of my seat.

The atmosphere in the first part was... fantastic. You *really* feel like you're getting inside Lois's sleep muddled head.

I *love* the way you introduce the scene - with the certainty that there *is* someone there, and then Lois snapping awake.

And then this:

It's almost like waking up from a dream and not knowing if that giant spider on the blanket was real or not. You get the impression so clearly - it's fantastic. *My* heart was thumping right along with Lois's.

Why do I get the feeling that's going to be important? <g>

And *this*:

I'd actually forgotten that I've seen some of this and knew she wasn't! Amazing writing.

And... I *love* that. The effect. Blurry. blurry. blurry... and then bang. Snaps back into focus. I'm sure you don't need to be told, but it's brilliant!

I don't think I need to say it again, but I will... brilliant! It's *very* effective. You can almost imagine...

I love that... the flow of thoughts. The groggy realisation. I wonder if time had passed between him leaving and her thoughts.

Because I've got to write that blasted essay I'm going to have to fly through Clark's POV.

I think I've said 'I *love* that' so many times already, but... dammit. I *do* love that. How when it comes down to it... when Lois needs him... it doesn't matter. His secret. His identity. Nothing matters as much as she does. And that's... amazing. How you can say that, more strongly than simply saying it, in only two lines... it's amazing.

I also have a feeling that's going to be important. How will Clark explain the broken glass? Will the police assume that's how the attacker got in and ignore the door? Were signs of forced entry (or even better, no forced entry) ignored?

/me flies through... damn essay...

I love that - a minute 'til the round century. And thanks for the time update. <g>

I really like the emphasis on the chair. It's very realistic - the way someone takes their frustration (about not being able to do anything) out on their environment. Fantastic little detail. Makes everything more... real.

Yes, Clark! Very stupid. But... I've got a feeling that'll be important too. <g>

And Wendy... dear, dear Wendy... if you don't share your posting schedule I'm going to assume it's going to be a daily update. <g>

Dave

Wohoo!

Maybe the posting schedule should do the title justice

Hi,

Great start.

I like where the story seems to be going AND I just can't wait for the next post!!!!!

Post! post! Please!!!!!!!

Wendy

WOW!

Tricia

I love your stories, Wendy. I keep saying you that. And specially the long ones, so I'm delighted to see a new one.

Wow. Great start. You can build tension in your story from the first line. Very impressive.

That part made me think about a movie I saw once: "D.O.A." with Dennis Quaid and Meg Ryan. A man was poisoned and had only 24 hours to live. He go to the police to lodge a complaint for murder and spend his last day trying to understand who poisonned him and why.

I think Lois could have the same type of reaction, and I will definitely follow her in the next parts. I want to know, too.

I'm glad he's not taking precautions about his identity when Lois is in danger. And I hope she'll find the truth during the day that might be her last one (actually, Wendy, I hope you're planning of find a way to let her live).

Great descriptions of the Clark's feelings. It's pretty hard to wait like that when you don't know how bad the things are going. I felt the same as him.

You get me hooked to your new story. And I'm joining the other to ask you when will be the next post. I'm impatient to read what's coming next.

I have the strong feeling that it's another new powerful story that begins here.

Wendy wrote something? I thought she was working on her novel?

Good tense set up. Missed out on a chance to add a nice emotional cliff hanger by having the doctor inform Clark of Lois' particular dilemna.

I suppose you're waiting until the end of the next instalment before laying that one on him, and her?

Tank (who thinks for a professed long story, this was a fairly short instalment )

Yay! You posted!!

More!!!

WOW, this is great and oh so mean. Please post again soon.

Jackie

I hate getting sucked into unfinished stories! The suspense is too much, although I always read them anyway. But this one is too good to pass up or be upset about!
~Kristen

You know, you're absolutely right, Tank! I originally intended to stop about two pages further on. Don't know how I missed that last night. Anyway, since it makes more sense in the context of what will be part 2, I've added in the remainder of what was planned to be part 1. So, anyone who's interested, if you refresh the thread you'll find more story in there now.

And... novel? What novel?


Wendy

Quite a tense beginning. I keep wanting Clark to learn about the little needle Lois got so he can do something about. I suggest taking a blood sample to Dr. Klein to see what he can do. She definitely needs an antibody in her system NOW.

And I wonder how Lois would want to spend her final 24 hours. That would be interesting, too.

gerry

Hmm...

When I saw 'lengthened' a lot of things ran through my head. Could Wendy be playing with us? Could it be a trick? Could it be my lucky ni... morning? Is it a way to sniff out more FDK? <g>

But... then I realised that I don't care, I'm just happy there's *more*!

Oooh, very nice! I have a feeling we've found a character we're going to love to hate. <g>

Har! See, Clark? See?

*ahem*

Sorry. <g>

I really like nail in the coffin reference. It's like you're easing us into the belief that Clark blames himself so that by the time we get to the last bit it's as if we've known all along that he was beating himself up over it.

'Of course it's true! I knew it all along!'

Really fantastic, Wendy. <g>

For some reason... I simply love that line. I love the way you can read so much into it without a speech tag or another clue... we know *exactly* what's going through Clark's head with just. that. line. Wonderful! (<-look, I picked up a new word. <g>)


Dun dun!! <bg>

Now, all we need is Tank to convince you that you've missed some sort of opportunity and I'll be set for tomorrow too. <g>

Dave (who hopes you'll excuse any stupidity since it's almost 2am <g>)

Oh no. Now you let us with a cruel cliffhanger ! I really hope for the next post very soon.

More story is good . . . except it's not enough more. And I notice you still haven't commented on a posting schedule (unless I missed it).

YAY! There is more up to the first part....I LOVE what you have done here. Clark sitting in the waiting room, agonizing over what might be wrong...the doctor telling him what Lois experienced and how she might only have one day to live.....you are EVIL! EVIL I say!

Hey, you posted! Wow! Well done.

Yvonne

PS: I've been practising Chopin's Funeral March for a while now and I'm getting quite good. Just let me know when you need me.

Hi,

Back again!

this is gonna be good!!!!!!!!!
nice first part wendy, i'm one of your fans

Oh my God!

simona

/me pounces on Wendy!!!

Yay, you're posting!!!

Yay, you posted!!!!

I love this. I've told you I just love this story. I can't wait to see more!

Poor Lois.

I love this line - Clark is all crushed and worried but trying to be smart for Lois, and at the same time praying for her well-being because he doesn't know what he'll do with himself if she won't be. /me hugs Clark.

Julie

Not another cliffhanger!!!!! Can't wait to see what Clark will do and how he will do it.

Post again very soon, please!!!!!

Happy days are here again! the sky above is clear again. La la la la la la la la(can't remember the rest of the words) But happy days are here again! Weeeeeyooooooo! Wendy is back! And so far I love it! Welcome back to where you belong Wendy!XXXOOO More soon! I can't wait for the rest of the ride! Laura :

What a dramatic beginning! I'm already hooked. Did I miss the posting schedule too, or do I just have to keep neurotically checking back every hour for part 2? Susan

*Squeals Madly* Yeeeeeeessssssssssssssss!!!! I was soooo waiting for this story to post. *Hugs Wendy then bites her* ACK!!! What the hell were you thinking of injecting our poor poor lois with crap!?! Eh, makes a good story. And you know it's got me hooked. I plan to come back later to do more fdk. I'm running out the door.

Rach

OMG! SHE IS GOING TO DIE!

AAAACK!!

Well, if the writers and producers of the television series 24 can spread the suspense of a twenty four hour period over months, so can Wendy! Months? Did I say that??

VERY unusual premise. I feel sorry for Clark since he keeps beating himself over the head wondering if it would have made a difference if he had flown Lois right to the hospital, but I'm sure it wouldn't have.

And now that some of the 24 hours have been used up by waiting for the ambulance and then waiting for Lois to regain consciousness long enough to tell the doctors what transpired, how much time does she still have left? And will part of that time be spent with Lois finally realizing that she has feelings for Clark (did you pinpoint a time frame for this, Wendy? I'm not sure what point thay're at in their relationship - just good friends or on the way to something more?) and deciding to act upon them, while Clark's entire focus will be to find out what was injected into Lois and how to find an antidote?? Decisions, decisions...

Looking forward to an interesting and enjoyable ride.

Wow! I'm just absolutely blown away by this reaction! How wonderful! Thank you all so very much!

Capes, right away you make me laugh:

ROFLMAO!!

Actually, I wasn't quite accurate when I said that this was all pre-Dr Klein. It may be pre- Bernard, but he's not the only Doc Klein around these days...

Jill, my very own over-stressed and over-worked doctor... I

Now, some of you have been asking about a posting schedule. I'm a little wary about committing to one, given my difficulties in writing lately. However, the Muse has put on a good spurt in the last couple of days, and I've written the equivalent of a section and a bit since posting this one. So I'm going to post part 2 this evening. I'll aim to post a new part whenever I've written roughly the equivalent of one section, and at minimum once a week. Okay?

And many, many thanks to all of you again! You're fantastic and I'm so grateful.


Wendy

OMG, she can't die!!! Clark will feel so powerless and helpless and it'll be tooooo sad... but ANYWAY, how will she spend her last 24 hours??? I LOVE THIS!!!!!

I have absolutely NO idea what you might try to do! But the very idea is fantastic! 24 hrs to live. What will she do in that time! I am assuming she'll no longer worry that admitting she has feelings for her partner is tantamount to DOOM

Onto part 2!!!

~NICOLE