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Thanks for all the comments. We'll get more about Clark's past as the chapters unfold themslves. I've heard at least one person comment that I should split these into two different stories- the date story, and the subsequent darker story about the prodigal son's return to Smallville. What do you guys think?

No! Keep it as one story! It's the interplay between those two threads that's going to make this so intriguing.

Keep it coming.

Yvonne

I agree with Yvonne.

One story.

Oh, keep it together! It's great! God, I'm just itching to know what Clark's shameful past was. I mean, I'm guessing it's something worse than what we saw either of the L&C Clark's go through...?

And typical Lois who doesn't want to date colleagues...let's see if Clark can smash through that one.

Looking forward to more!
Jen

Hi,

Great part.

I'm with the others who voted for keeping this a single story. When Lois finds out whatever it is that Clark doesn't want to share about his past, she'll have to deal with that along with her feelings for him and her desire to find the truth that's out there.

And just what happened to Clark? What was he that people in Smallville will want him to be again? This is good stuff. Keep it coming!

Yeah, there's no need really to separate this story, it works well together.

Now on with the "why I like it" section, it's so cool to read this, so much like watching the episode, some of my favorite stories always make me feel like I'm watching the show and your writing has that feel.

Now on this line...

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Other than a letter twice a year, and a check, he had no interest in ever revisiting his childhood.

You got me wondering, did he accidentally hurt someone and is paying restitution or is this child support???

Well done Shayne!!

Keep it coming!

TEEEEEJ/who says "GO HESTON!!!"

Hmm... notice you're still putting repost on this... which makes me wonder why the heck I stopped reading this way back when.

Because I sure don't remember the shades of GGGoH. Maybe that was when I'd started to drift away again...

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Managing to avoid Clark Kent for the rest of the day hadn’t been easy, but Lois had made the effort. Speaking to him immediately would have been a mistake; she’d have said things she’d have regretted.

Ah, so she didn't lay into him.

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The older man grimaced. “I work for the National Inquisitor. Some farmer claims to have found a UFO on his property, and I’m being sent out to investigate.”

Well... sort of a bad guy.

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“You’ve been avoiding me,” Clark said. “And I’m not entirely sure why.”

Way to be direct and to the point, Clark!

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Lois almost thought that Clark paled, but she dismissed it as being a trick of the light.

Awwww

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Playing was exactly what she wished she could do. Instead, she had to give him the bad news.

“My concerns are more about the private part of our relationship.”

Awww! But yay! This means she really wants a relationship! And, heck, she *called* it a relationship.

tbc... because of that darned graemlin limit...

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Clark was silent for a long moment. “That’s not exactly what I was expecting to hear. Can I ask why?”

I point this line out because it's very unlike Clark; however, you've given us quite a different Clark. One who's overcome quite a lot to get where he is. He wasn't sheltered by the love of his parents, and he's had some hard living to do, but he's battled through that marvelously to become a wonderful and intriguing person. I think what I'm trying to say is, you've really painted a brilliant picture of a completely different Clark Kent. And I can *hear* his tone, and up front manner, and it fits wonderfully with the Clark you've created. Did that make any sense? :p

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“Then we can just be passing through. I could pretend to be your fiancé.”

The idea had popped into her head with a flash of inspiration. “You could just pretend to be coming home for a visit. Simon doesn’t know me by appearance…I could just pretend to be the little woman.”

Whee! I like that idea.

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She should know; she’d had that with Lex, before he was killed.

What?!

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“You wouldn’t want to do that,” Clark said, turning to watch the road once again. “I didn’t exactly have a happy childhood in Smallville.”

Lois grinned. “So you were a nerd in high school? It’ll do your reputation a world of good to be seen with a woman like me.”

Oh boy... Lois doesn't have a clue what she's getting into... not that I have any more than an inkling... Eeps!

Okay, Shayne, I'm all caught up!! Ready for the next part.

I'll try not to fall behind again.

Oh... and since you asked... I think this definitely should stay as one story! I agree with what Yvonne said.

Sara

Now that's interesting; I understood the letters and check to be coming *to* him, rather than from him, probably related to the rental of the Kent farm.

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I understood the letters and check to be coming *to* him,

OOOOOOH and AH HA!! Yeah you're on to something there too, and probably more right than my assupmtion. Okay, yeah that makes more sense really, cause he may have been the recipient of insurance or something. I just figured the "shame" of his hometown meant *he* was paying, but that would be tough for a guy that writes travel catalogues and freelance articles.

TEEEEEJ

Well, I know I used to think you should split them, Shayne

But I've changed my mind. This dark Smallville story really needs L&C to be at a certain point of intimacy, if that's the word -- liking each other, mutually attracted, but *not* knowing each other much. I'm not sure how you could do that other than a blind date -- if they'd just met at work, Lois's defenses would be firmly in place and she'd never give him a chance when she starts hearing about the bad stuff. But this way, at least she got to see him at his best, before the junk started floating up.

And... I'm always suspicious of any named minor characters

Simon Hunt is going to have a bigger role in this story than just an excuse for Lois to pretend to be with Clark.

PJ

Keep them one story...and what happened in Smallville already?

One story is fine.

The only complaint I have at this time is that was really tooo short of a post.

James

Shayne

An excellent part!

I can't wait to find out what happened in Smallville.

Please post more soon.

Tricia

Just finished playing catch-up, and hoo-boy this one is a keeper.

So we're essentially in the regular alt-verse, a few years before Tempus, Anyone, right? With the sole exception that Lois made it back safely from the Congo?

Love the little details. It's clear you've crafted a very detailed backstory, and I look forward to reading it.

Hazel