Ya did good!
Nice job on this part..love the emotion between these too and the love for the baby from Clark *oh*! Plus Clark FLEW!! YAY!!
~Liz
That's true with full term babies, but premature babies often don't have any deformation of the skull because they're smaller. I've seen preemies both ways, as a former Labor and Delivery nurse. I guess you can have it either way you choose.
Nan
Ooo, didn't think of that! That is a very good point (pun intended)!
I still look at the pics of Brandon with his little torpedo head!
~Liz
Re: your concerns re: childbirth
I wouldn't describe it as ripping, tearing or jagged unless something really was going wrong. Think major mega menstrual cramps: cramping, squeezing, pulling, etc. I probably would have written "intensely painful" rather than "disgustingly painful." (homebirth, 9 pound baby)
You did an excellent job of conveying the anxiety involved without getting bogged down in the details though.
And since I've been moved to comment; I'd like to take a moment to mention that I think you're doing a really good job with this story and I've been eagerly looking forward to each new part.
Childbirth is definitely one of those: Have to do it to know it things. I still think you did an excellent job at trying to portray what you did.
What got me though, was your description of the child - of her reaction to the child.
Those sweet special starfish hands. I am choked just remembering them. I kissed them - and those tiny feet - a billion times.
And that feeling of knowing you would kill anyone who harmed that child. Oh yes. I know it well.
Mama tiger. That is what i am.
Your chapter moved me to tears. I hope that makes you happy, because it should.
Wow, Sara! This was excellent!
Okay, so let's have the last few parts so these two can finally get together!
Wendy
Holy Christ, I must admit I had a small conniption when the truck broke down. But then I prayed to the FoLC Gods that Clark's powers would come back. So thank God. :p Love the baby's name!
JD
Aw very nice chapter, I keep hopeing some how some way that it is Clarks baby from some trip in time they forgot about. Oh well if it has to be Lex's I juat hope he turns out like his mother. Laura
Hi,
Great part.
Love the name.
Now, lets get rid of Luthor and make Lois a widow.
More ASAP, please.
MAF
Sara
WOW, an excellent part!
and look forward to reading more. Now, they need to get rid of Luthor.
Tricia
Now, lets get rid of Luthor and make Lois a widow
Oh Yessss!!!!
Kill Lex and make them happy :rolleyes:
karla
Wow.
I am absolutely thrilled with the response to this part. I mean it. I'm awed. And honoured. And very, very grateful. Thank you all so much!!!
Your chapter moved me to tears. I hope that makes you happy, because it should.
And your fdk on this one moved *me* to tears, Leela
Sara