FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/04/05 10:46 PM
Any and all feedback welcome 
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 01:02 AM
Nicole
You may have noticed I’m a reader who hasn’t been posting feedback regularly.
Unfortunately I’m a little disappointed in the direction the story has taken. I thoroughly enjoyed the first part of the story. But have only skimmed the last few parts. The plot seems to be at a standstill. I agree completely with Wendy and Erica. Some of the material does not advance the plot in any way. I also have a problem with the length of some of your paragraphs. This is a personal thing but I tend to wander off and lose concentration if the paragraph is too long.
This is just my opinion and I know lots of other readers will disagree.
I really love the rest of your work.
You are an excellent writer. 
And I will read the rest of this to see what happens.
Tricia
You may have noticed I’m a reader who hasn’t been posting feedback regularly.
Unfortunately I’m a little disappointed in the direction the story has taken. I thoroughly enjoyed the first part of the story.
But have only skimmed the last few parts. The plot seems to be at a standstill. I agree completely with Wendy and Erica. Some of the material does not advance the plot in any way. I also have a problem with the length of some of your paragraphs. This is a personal thing but I tend to wander off and lose concentration if the paragraph is too long.This is just my opinion and I know lots of other readers will disagree.
I really love the rest of your work.
You are an excellent writer. And I will read the rest of this to see what happens.Tricia
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 08:08 AM
Hi
I agree with Tricia on this: "I have a problem with the length of some of your paragraphs. This is a personal thing but I tend to wander off and lose concentration if the paragraph is too long."
Ok....lets see...Is just that I think is Too much information, all the memories, all the talks, all the thoughts....and he still in coma.
Karla
I agree with Tricia on this: "I have a problem with the length of some of your paragraphs. This is a personal thing but I tend to wander off and lose concentration if the paragraph is too long."
Ok....lets see...Is just that I think is Too much information, all the memories, all the talks, all the thoughts....and he still in coma.
Karla
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 01:40 PM
Hi,
Great part. That explain does dreams or memories.
Get back here! I want more!
More ASAP, please.
MAF
Great part.
That explain does dreams or memories. Quote
“Smooth,” Lois said.
Jack turned. “How long have you been here?” he asked, embarrassed.
“Just long enough to hear your threat. You know, I have tried pleading and luring him back with words of love. But blackmail… that I haven’t tried,” she said, smiling.
“Well, I’ve never been a straight-shooter,” Jack said.
Jack turned. “How long have you been here?” he asked, embarrassed.
“Just long enough to hear your threat. You know, I have tried pleading and luring him back with words of love. But blackmail… that I haven’t tried,” she said, smiling.
“Well, I’ve never been a straight-shooter,” Jack said.
Get back here! I want more!More ASAP, please.
MAF
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 04:04 PM
I like Jack's conversation with Clark and the encouraging news that there is brainwave activity and he's been dreaming. I'm still with you.
Artemis
Artemis
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 06:01 PM
Well I also am still with you but I do see the others point too. It is time to wake him up now. they still have enought o hash out when he regains consciousness. laura
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/05/05 08:46 PM
Thank you guys for sticking w/ me... I am posting Part 16 now, and you guys may get your wish 
Re: FDK: Have A Little Faith in Me Pt. 15/20? - 01/08/05 09:07 PM
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I think in the future we’ll keep a lojack on you so we know where you are at all times,” he joked.
I'm still here. I'm really enjoying this. I do though find when the paragraphs are large I have troube following.
I am now off to read part 16 - thumbs up from this computer.
