FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/14/04 06:42 PM
Hi,
Great story.
Great story.
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/14/04 08:41 PM
Hi maria,
Thanks for your support
I really enjoyed writing this story.
you asked me if Clark will never tell her about his true identity...
well in the first part I said it would be a piece to be taken right before "And the Answer is..." So, presuming that Lois would find out in that episode and make him reveal himself in "We have a lot to talk about", I wanted to make what Shakespeare would call a dramatic irony... which means you say something now that will eventually antecipate and action taken in the future. That is why I chose to finish the story without revealing who he really is making it clear that "They will have a lot to talk about" as in the original episode.
I hope I´ve succeeded.
Thanks for everything.
MDL
Thanks for your support
I really enjoyed writing this story.you asked me if Clark will never tell her about his true identity...
well in the first part I said it would be a piece to be taken right before "And the Answer is..." So, presuming that Lois would find out in that episode and make him reveal himself in "We have a lot to talk about", I wanted to make what Shakespeare would call a dramatic irony... which means you say something now that will eventually antecipate and action taken in the future. That is why I chose to finish the story without revealing who he really is making it clear that "They will have a lot to talk about" as in the original episode.
I hope I´ve succeeded.
Thanks for everything.
MDL
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/14/04 08:56 PM
Hey MDL,
LOVED LOVED the story. It turned out differently then I expected at the end. But I LOVED IT!!!. Keep up the good work hon.
OH and this part had me cracking up..
Can't wait to see more stories from you!
Rach
LOVED LOVED the story. It turned out differently then I expected at the end. But I LOVED IT!!!. Keep up the good work hon.
OH and this part had me cracking up..
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“Come on… stupid thing. Come on!!!”
The elevator closed its doors.
5th floor.
(…)
4th floor.
(…)
3rd floor.
“Come ooooooooooooooooooonnnn!!!”
2nd floor.
(…)
1st floor.
“*&%$¨&&*&¨%$*!!!”
ground floor.
The elevator closed its doors.
5th floor.
(…)
4th floor.
(…)
3rd floor.
“Come ooooooooooooooooooonnnn!!!”
2nd floor.
(…)
1st floor.
“*&%$¨&&*&¨%$*!!!”
ground floor.
Rach
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/14/04 09:09 PM
Had to say something again....
Erica you are the sweetest person.
And I better see more stories!
Erica you are the sweetest person.
And I better see more stories!
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/14/04 10:57 PM
“Zyknux, our planet. They agreed to be tested by our females. And they were truly happy to join us there.”
LMAO!
LMAO!
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/15/04 06:18 AM
Well I just finished part 1
That part made me laugh. The way it is written and spaced made me feel for Lois - oh dear slow elevators, or at least they feel that way when you wanna just GO GO GO!
I can't believe that Lois missed her calls. Poor Lois. I feel bad that she is afraid for Clark at the moment.
Off to part two...
oh why do you feel insecure? This rocks! I love this story. It had such a weird story line going on! THat's so cool!
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The elevator closed its doors.
5th floor.
(…)
4th floor.
(…)
3rd floor.
“Come ooooooooooooooooooonnnn!!!”
2nd floor.
(…)
1st floor.
“*&%$¨&&*&¨%$*!!!”
ground floor.
5th floor.
(…)
4th floor.
(…)
3rd floor.
“Come ooooooooooooooooooonnnn!!!”
2nd floor.
(…)
1st floor.
“*&%$¨&&*&¨%$*!!!”
ground floor.
I can't believe that Lois missed her calls. Poor Lois. I feel bad that she is afraid for Clark at the moment.
Off to part two...
oh why do you feel insecure? This rocks! I love this story. It had such a weird story line going on! THat's so cool!
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/15/04 06:29 AM
I found this part amusing: I did find it go at a way quicker pace than the other parts. Were you in a rush?
I dislike Gallan. Why didn't he have enough guts to tell Stella his feeling in the beginning and she wouldn't have to have been such a sceemer (can't remember how to spell that word). Well I am glad it ended up alright. I wouldn't want Clark to go bye bye.
Just curious. Why was the final two chapter instead of ch 2 being the final and ch 1 being whatever number after the last one was?
OH. You left me dangeling. Clark never told Lois! Eek. OH well LOL. I guess we know how that will end up! Great ending to a funny and scarey story! Oh, I still love the title!!!
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“Oh, Clark… I love you too.”
A kiss.
“What about London?” A kiss. “…I have to go…”
“You´re not…” A kiss. “…going…” A kiss. “…anywhere.”
“I am…” A kiss “…not?”
“I…” A kiss. “…talked to Perry…” A kiss “…and he said…” A kiss “Elise is taking the job.”
“Oh…” A kiss “… that was what…” A kiss “…she was trying to tell…” A kiss “…me.”
“Yeah.” A kiss.
A kiss.
“What about London?” A kiss. “…I have to go…”
“You´re not…” A kiss. “…going…” A kiss. “…anywhere.”
“I am…” A kiss “…not?”
“I…” A kiss. “…talked to Perry…” A kiss “…and he said…” A kiss “Elise is taking the job.”
“Oh…” A kiss “… that was what…” A kiss “…she was trying to tell…” A kiss “…me.”
“Yeah.” A kiss.
I dislike Gallan. Why didn't he have enough guts to tell Stella his feeling in the beginning and she wouldn't have to have been such a sceemer (can't remember how to spell that word). Well I am glad it ended up alright. I wouldn't want Clark to go bye bye.
Just curious. Why was the final two chapter instead of ch 2 being the final and ch 1 being whatever number after the last one was?
OH. You left me dangeling. Clark never told Lois! Eek. OH well LOL. I guess we know how that will end up! Great ending to a funny and scarey story! Oh, I still love the title!!!
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/15/04 08:53 AM
I love to laugh and you made me laugh a lot. It was a great story with a terrifice premise 
- and she investigated the situation and took immediate action. Then the HEA. 
Seriously, what was not to love?
It was a great story with a terrifice premise - and she investigated the situation and took immediate action. Then the HEA. Seriously, what was not to love?
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/15/04 11:45 AM
Cute ending 
Jose
Jose
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/15/04 01:46 PM
Great Story! 
Ingra
Ingra
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/16/04 08:50 PM
Whee, I'm really behind on my reading >< MDL this was lovely! I loved the surprise ending, I had fully expected those men to be murdered. Your humor was wonderful, and I love how you lead into We Have a Lot to Talk About 
I expect to see more from you!
I expect to see more from you!
Re: FDK:Even Steel Melts-Final - 08/17/04 09:08 AM
FoLCs, 
!!!!!
I can´t thank you enough for all your kind comments. It was a great pleasure to me to write this piece. I really wanted to make it scary in the beggining so people would get interested in my story... Well that was my theory. Putting it into to practice would be a completely new ball game.
I´m currently working on a longer story about the Alt-World and if you guys think this one was scary... well... Have I ever mentioned I have a tendency to be
?
Again, thanks for all your support. I see you soon with another creepy story.
MDL
!!!!!I can´t thank you enough for all your kind comments. It was a great pleasure to me to write this piece. I really wanted to make it scary in the beggining so people would get interested in my story... Well that was my theory. Putting it into to practice would be a completely new ball game.
I´m currently working on a longer story about the Alt-World and if you guys think this one was scary... well... Have I ever mentioned I have a tendency to be
? Again, thanks for all your support. I see you soon with another creepy story.
MDL