Bringing down Luthor before he does something awful? Can't happen, can it?

Argh.

Julie

WEll one day it will happen...their attraction for each other will just BUBBLE UP and be larger than life and they will kiss hungrily.....and realize that this is what they both want........

I don't want Luthor to be able to hit on Lois....
Clark should be at the interview with her...

MORE PLEASE

Hi,

Great part.

More ASAP, please.

MAF

Good segment Wendy. The A plot is going along nicely and I feel the B plot just bubbling under the surface. I can't wait to see what happens next! Laura

Excellent Wendy!

Our favorite team is ready to nail Luthor! Yes!

~Liz

Well, the B-plot is continuing to build. I like that touch about rookie Henderson and runaway Lane girls; that makes a lot of sense and is a cool bit of backstory to add depth to this universe.

But, um, are we going to get around to any action anytime soon? Far be it from me to complain about introspection, but... This story's going at a fairly leisurely pace so far, and could do with an increase of speed

PJ the Impatient

Well. Where do I start? Logjam in brain...

From part 4, which I didn't get to until late, the whole traumatized by Trask thing. I really, really like that angle. And I don't remember seeing that before. The idea that the garbage Trask spewed would climb into his head and trouble him, stay with him...Ok. I can totally buy that.

And from part 5, I really like the backstory with Henderson. A creative and clever little twist which feels new.

That said...Oh,Wendy. Seriously. What are you doing?

There is just so, so, so much thinking. Big, long paragraphs of it!

And I'm not knocking thoughtful, complex characters. That's good...just man. Man! Pam said when are we going get some action. And I'm just thinking I'd kill for a bit of dialogue. Ok, more than a bit. A big,fat chunk.

And then, that they are so careful, both so obviously perfect for each other, but so full of fear at admitting their feelings...it kind of drives me crazy. And the fact that it drives me crazy makes me feel...a little crazy, because I KNOW, Wendy. I know full well- you're doing that on purpose!

Darn you! I can't decide if I just hate this fic. Or if I just hate how you're teasing me with it.

And I know that's a backhanded compliment. But it is a compliment.

Last little thing: the tiny bit of dialogue in this part included the "when did someone tell little Lois Lane she was loved?" And, I have to say, that was a sucker punch to the heart.

Still not completely happy with you, though.

CC

Wo-a!

Two words: Im-pressive

The flashback at Lois' childhood was fantastic with the Henderson reference

And the thoughts that Lois is putting in the Luthor issue

Jose (who hopes that Lois tell soon Clark about the interview )

Whoa, nice Luthor synopsis, really indepth, you hit a lot of points there that really make a ton of sense, and I'm glad it's *Lois* that's thinking it all out not Clark explaining it to her. Rather her going into her interview with Lex all impressed and glamoured out by him, she's going to be looking for faults now, objectively nitpicking I think. Well done, Wendy.

And yeah, the back story was cute and sweet, ouchies even. You got me going "poor Lois" *weep*.

Okay looking to see what comes next!

TEEEEEJ

Great part

The story of Lois' childhood is sooo sad but very well written and somehow beautiful (does that make any sense???).

I'd say, let's go nail Luthor and and then... um... then let's get them over those weird ideas why they can't be together. This is just so frustrating.

More soon, please

Julia

Wendy

An excellent part!

Tricia

Okay, more instrospection... surprise!

Some good background presented here, but we are in danger of treading water if we can't get into some good old wham action soon. Since this fic is going to be a long one we know that the relationship is going to develop slowly and will need some 'outside' pushes to force it out into the open. That means WHAMS!

Lots of nasty, evil whams. The more the better.

Oh, and if you can see your way clear... get Lois a haircut

Tank (who is sitting here listening to his new Corrs CD secure in the knowledge that he has his Corrs concert tickets and a hotel reservation... all he has to do is survive until the concert)

Okay, I'm getting the impression that people want things to happen. Yes, this is - so far - a fairly slow-moving story with rather a lot of atmosphere-setting and character development, which may be a mistake on my part. The difficulty I have with this stuff is that the 'catalyst WHAM' to make them become friends has already happened, so that's just backstory. However, things do start to happen reasonably soon - I don't know whether you'll consider the next section or two as 'things starting to happen', but there are some quite major developments coming up. I hope that will satisfy people.

(CC, you're a very tough audience! )

I am very glad, though, that Lois's story touched some of you - and that a couple of people specifically enjoyed the Henderson connection.

I don't have time for a detailed response right now, I'm afraid; I'm about to go off again on one of my business trips away. This time I won't be back until next Wednesday, and so while I will do my utmost to fit in a new part before I leave, there won't be another part for a week after that. Sorry, but I have no internet access while in Dublin.

Thanks again to all who posted comments!


Wendy