Yays and nays can stay here!!!

Interesting start to this story. Lois is uninjured and in fairly good health, voluntarily staying away for the sake of her family. When she gets back, it'll be interesting to see Lois' reaction to this Clark/Superman she's heard so much about.

Poor Clark. In this version, he's not even allowed to search for Lois, and neither is HG Wells. I do like the way Herb dropped the hint that Lois will someday show up. So Clark's left with an imaginary Lois. Wonder if this Lois meets up with his expectations?

Any idea if this will be a short, medium, or long story?

Keep up the writing!

Wow, I want to read more.

I loved the description you used! Talk about dropping a reader right in the middle of the jungle with Lois. Then with Clark, you could almost feel his agony. *sigh* So close and yet so far away.

Post the next part soon, I'm hooked on this one and I'm not really familiar with the alternate universes...you may end up explaining it all to me through your story.

Yvette

Um... what Roger and Yvette said. Interesting premise and off to an intriguing start.

One minor possible nit-pick: who are the "Ma" and "Pa" that Clark thinks about -- and whose pie he is looking forward to in Smallville? If this is the original AU as seen in TA, it can't be the Kents because they are dead; is it the Langs? I could see Lana's parents wanting him to call them that when he was engaged to her. Or is it someone else -- someone important to him from the post-Kent/pre-Lois era? Just curious...

More, please, at your earliest convenience.

Phil

Phil picked up on my concern - also, Clark never called his parents 'Ma' and 'Pa.' They were Mom and Dad.

Great start!

I'm really looking forward to more,
Irene

Great start!

Should be fun to see Lois experience all the new stuff that's happened in 10 years. Not to mention meeting Superman!

Looking forward to more.

~Liz

Hi, thanks for the comments. My next posting will deal with the "Ma and Pa" issues .......

Remember this is almost the current day Smallville....and one of Alt-Clark's biggest issues when he was missing Lois was his lack of a real family.......

Not dropping any real hints here but all will be made clear.

No idea how long this is going to be...I'm flying by the seat of my skirt here! HA HA

Good!! A new story!!

Simply love the above lines and the sentiment behind them. When one is in an unfamilar place which cannot be called 'home', the most mundane things will trigger a memory from the pleasurable and familiar past.

Definite "yay" from me! Lois' thought babbles are wonderfully in character and you've done a great job of portraying Clark's incredible loneliness.

Alt-Clark finding Alt-Lois hasn't been done anything as often as TOGOM rewrites, so keep right up with this! Looking forward to MORE!

Hazel

Hi,

Great start.

Too short but good, more. Laura