Surprise!
The only thing that confused me was at the beginning of this part. At the end of the last "prologue" we saw Lori take the name as "Lois" professionally. Then you talk about Lois and Clark becoming wealthy after they retired writing books, and I thought you were talking about Lori Lois Lane, not canon Lois. I hadn't remembered the years (dates) from the previous part, so at first I thought Lori and Clark were already retired, not taking a weekend at the farm
Since it was 40 some odd years after you said they had retired and written become wealthy. Then I realized that couldn't be right, so I went back in double checked. Is there a way that you could designate the Lois you mention before the Title sequence as Clark's first wife Lois? Because "retire the first time" didn't clarify it enough for me, since it could also refer to this (time-traveled) Clark and Lori.
When I saw that Lori was teaching the children about archery (and because I'm also watching S6 of Smallville), I instantly thought of Green Arrow.
I began to wonder if Oliver Queen was going to end up being a descendant of Clark's in your story. That could be a fun tie-in to the Justice League.