FDK goes here for Sue S.'s awesome story - The Other POV.

Okay, now that I've started this thread, I can go back and mention how much fun it was.

One little note... what's with Clark's

Oooooh. She's not talking about Superman here!

Yep. Yep. Yep. and

Oh, poor Lois for thinking so badly about herself. For thinking so badly of Superman, because of Linda.

She WANTS to ignore Superman?

Yep. Yep. Yep. Here's your Clarkie bear.

I've overgone my smilie count... must go to another post.

Best way to wake up on a Sunday morning is to a companion story! Loved the second POV! Great job!

Part two - FDK -

Cry with happiness or cry with sadness for Clark?

Ooooh. She stumped Superman.

That's right, he did, didn't he? Naughty Clark, full of slip-ups tonight. Electricity? That sounds good.

You know, if she didn't know CK=Superman, he's just shot Clark in the back, right?

Okay, Clark, you do realize that you think that she thinks of you as just a friend? How does that make her your 'secret girlfriend'? Unless you mean, in that secret fantasy dream world in which you live where Lois loves you? You know: Metropolis.

Oh, dear. Lois' secret fantasies have all come true. She's got Superman just where she wants him. On the bottom! Sorry, Clark, it was nice knowing you. I hope her torture is worth it at the end.

I love her figuring it all out before he even speaks! So true for her character.

See, torture.

"You know, Superman, it's funny when you phrase it like that.... but I was just thinking the other day how Clark and I have known each other for two years as well."

Pooor Clark. He thinks he's going to disappoint Lois. My heart breaks for him. He thinks that she's going to go to bed with Superman and wake up with Clark and be disappointed because neither of him was perfect.

Okay, Lois, time to reassure him:
Okay, not very reassuring, so either Lois doesn't think she'll be perfect tonight either, or she's still torturing Clark, or she doesn't realize that she just kicked that pooor v.... very patient man in the crotch, which won't give either one of them a perfect evening -- self-fulfilling destiny. Maybe she should wash his face first, that way neither of them will be reminded of Linda during the rest of the evening and that will make it perfect.

Okay, back to re-read The Whole Truth. I see a vicious circle developing here...

Awesome Sue, awesome. I love the insight Lois finally gets.

And finally Clark has the guts to come clean.
Yeah, I can believe he would be that insecure.

Artemis

Delightful, Sue! Both of them!

I had to keep fanning the story to keep the fog from forming with all the heat coming off this story! Sue, you have Clark's number, and Lois is learning! But you better get a few ice cubes out so that the next installment doesn't burn up.

Don't know how stong I should emphasize that you need to keep one going!

Pat

Aww loved it. Thank you also for extending the ending so that we could know how it turned out. Beautiful. Thanks. Laura

Great stories. I love the way it was shown from both perspectives.

Delightful!

Sue! This story is perfection"

Now you just need to post the next part to tell us how perfect their night went. Because your Lois and Clark is always perfection!

Andreia

Good morning!

Virginia - Wow! Seriously, thank you! I'll try to answer some of the questions you posed -- starting with the "perfection" ending. I was saddened to see that you took both of them literally. I swear to you that Clark was teasing her. That's why Lois answers with a giggle. If he'd been serious, she would have been a lot more reassuring. I'll change it so that he says it in a teasing tone, just to avoid others reading it the same way. Nah, it didn't bother him at all. To wit: That [the movie] was pure fiction, just like the kiss between the painfully wooden actors playing Linda and Superman. He was almost insulted, but the situation was so far from any kind of reality that he very much doubted anyone could believe it had actually happened. That pretty much sums up how he feels about the whole movie. I had that in the original version, but it took it out because I was basically repeating myself. I'll try to shade it so that it's more obvious he's referencing the entire movie and not just the "love scene". My thought process exactly! But this is Lois, and she's not thinking clearly in this situation.

Mrs. Luthor - Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

Artemis - It was a very fine line to walk, having Lois figure it out without getting angry. Knowing that she knew something Linda would never figure out sure softened the blow for her. Clark came clean because there was no reason to be insecure.

Happy Girl - Thank you! Nice to see you drop by!

Pat - You thought that was steamy? Heh. I actually think the first story is more steamy, but maybe that's because I still have the parts that got cut living in my head. I wasn't sure if having Clark notice Lois' breasts heaving in that tight gown crossed at PG13 line or not, so I cut that. If you read it again, it was right when he gets all up close and personal and tells her that maybe she is his secret girlfriend. I won't be continuing this one, though. I'm supposed to be working on something else. The response to the first one was so overwhelming that I couldn't say no (and there was more to say).

Laura - You're certainly welcome! Thanks for always having my back!

Caincrazy - I'm delighted that you liked both stories. Thank you!

Sydney - Thanks! Yes, all my stories come with a money-back guarantee. :p

Lola - 2006? Ah, good times. <gets a little misty eyed>

Andreia - Sadly, there will not be an nfic continuation. I'm working on another story and all my dirty thoughts have to go towards that one instead.

My heartfelt thanks to everyone who nudges me along and keeps me writing. You guys are the best of the best!

Yeah ya do!!! I mean.....what?

Even awesom-er the second time around with your edits. I loved it from beginning to end from both POVs.



I liked seeing Lois' and Linda's reaction to the film. Can I say that I was gloating along with her at how awful it sounded? Then the transition to the revelation from Lois' POV made so much sense. Loved the reveal and the reaction on Clark's and then Lois' parts.

Virginia said:
Actually, that's not how I took it at all. I read it to be Clark's way of saying that tonight was already perfect, but if it wasn't for Lois, then she could lie if she wanted.

And then the tease from Lois -- I could have read it two different ways, but didn't think of it in the terms you mentioned. One way I thought of was the reference to the gawd-awful Linda/Superman drivel they'd both sat through. Supposed to be perfect in the movies, but if their lives turn out differently, then that's better.

The other way is that Lois knows that Clark isn't perfect and that neither is she. How could life, loving and living together, always go smoothly? I think Lois would rather have a real life with Clark.

FWIW...

B

Sue,

Wonderful story.


The Lois POV was spectacularly done.

Delicious. Delightful. Delectable.

There is nothing like the truth and the whole truth is even better!

In my wildest dreams I did not think that a companion piece could surpass the original, but it did!

This is the BEST possible comeuppance for Linda King. No way can she ever beat Mad Dog Lane!

Plan on hearing about the story at the 2013 Kerth Awards!

love your stories, and your revelations! so happy you're still writing!

Oh, I'm melting into a pile of waffy goo. That was so sweet! Thanks for taking this part beyond the revelation. How nice to be able to read this story from both POVs.

Virginia said: Lol, so true! Each time I read one version, I'm struck by something else which makes me go back and read the other. Maybe I should open two windows so I can read the two POVs side-by-side, like one of those parallel-passage-Bibles.

Thanks for posting so quickly! Now you've got me curious about this new story you're working on... Hope to see it here on the boards soon!

Oh Sue, a companion story from you, and so quickly after the first. A girl could get used to this. I read this yesterday and have been replaying it in my mind ever since. I'm just in love with this scenario. Wish we could have seen it on the show. Actually, I take that back. Reading it from you is even better.

Jackie

It's beyond gratifying to see people come back and leave comments on this second story. My heartfelt thanks to everyone who's taken the time to brighten my day.

Love you guys!

What a marvelous revelation! Short, sweet, to the point, and it fits so wonderfully with the story. Awesome. Like the fic.

So wonderful!! I think this fic may be even better than the first one -- all those sweet reveals about what Lois was thinking, making the dialogue just that much more delicious:

In the original, this came off a little like 'oh Lois stop throwing yourself at Superman' -- but knowing that she knows -- pure waffy heaven!

And the whole ending -- wonderful!! Loved it all!

Right. Title.



Bad Clark. Using x-ray vision like that.

‘My bed, now. Or I’ll write an exclusive’?

He had felt an urgent, human need?

So, time to make love, then?

Uuuummm…

You know, I’ve read the FDK (Virginia’s always so much so (sic) fun Michael

Good morning!

Iolan - Thank you! I squirm at long, drawn-out revelations myself. Maybe it's because I hate confrontations.

Mozart - In the original I had Lois very calm and cool instead of flirtatious. It should have been a signal to Clark that something was up, but he was a little preoccupied at the time. I'm glad you liked the story - thanks!

Michael - Ah, there you are! I've been looking forward to reading over your shoulder! I got lucky and Virginia suggested a perfect title. Feel free to use it. Bwaaa! It's a darn good thing I wasn't drinking anything at the time. Heh. If he had, I'm sure he would have reflected on it at length in his version. Sure. And the first thing they'll take off is Linda's lipstick. If you knew what lay in store, you'd give up camping and just move in.

Thanks to everyone who's commented. It is very greatly appreciated!

Yeah I only can do about one such FDK per day on average so I have to make sure I keep up with serialized stories, then come the vignettes Stupid RL. And good thing I don't have enough brain for writing ATM.

I already made a note in my ideas file.

I *know*. People keep telling me I'm bad for their hardware. Would even put a general warning into the siggy. But when you reach the siggy, you've already managed to neither choke on your beverage nor use it to short out your keyboard, monitor, or laptop in general so it kind of defeats the purpose.

Glad you got a few laughs out of it. Funny, how you where thinking her nightgown from BatP/HoL (argh, which is it?). Anyhow, actually, was going for silken veils since that's her favorite show-up-and-surprise-Clark outfit, while the nightgown is for Superman to show up on an arranged stay-in-date.

True. So very true. And I'll just say I was thinking the very same thing while reading. There's at least a 33.3333333333333% chance that that's true.

His heart would stall? Doesn't that qualify?

You're welcome. Tuesday references really are a cue-card for me. /blames Joss Whedon/

You quote enough, there's a reasonable probability to hit it?
And Michael

Fabulous companion piece. Loved seeing this from Lois' perspective- her realization, figuring out what she can do to mess with him, drawing it out of him... Really well done!

Mouse - Having Lois mess with Clark when she knows his secret is one of my favorite things. Any time I get a chance for her to get a little bit of payback, I take it. Thanks!

Michael - This is a double-edged sword. I love the long FDK, but it makes me sad to think you're so busy replying to all these stories that you aren't working on your own. There has to be a happy medium somewhere. I'm pretty sure that everyone else is like me - as soon as I see your name, it's like the plane is about to land. I dispose of all beverages and snacks, make sure my seat is in the upright and locked position and that my seatbelt is low and snug across my lap. Well, sure! That's because you said "blue silk", not "blue chiffon". I'm pretty sure the blue nightgown was in BatP since she wouldn't answer Lex until she knew what Superman wanted. Wow - only a one in three chance that you're telling the truth? <sigh> Men. :rolleyes: Yes, I suppose it does. Aha! I've only seen maybe two episodes of Buffy, but I do adore me some Firefly and Dr. Horrible.

I love the way Lois's mind works in the early part of the fic. She starts out being jealous of Linda and Superman, but then she sort of morphs into being jealous of Linda and Clark.

It's a great pointer to the revelation when she discovers that Superman *is* Clark.

Corrina.

No, if I'd actually manage to get started, FDK would only slow down writing. It's the initial kick start that's the problem. /goes checking spring-loaded boot mechanisms/ Also, if things get really bad, I could always offer to BR. More feedback, less public FDK though Michael

Corinna - Thank you! I agree, if there's one thing Clark can be counted on for, it's that he will put Lois first or try to find a way to comfort her when she's hurting. And, if there's one thing that Lois can be counted on for, it's that she considers both Superman *and* Clark hers. I did so love the early seasons when she'd be jealous, but try to paint it as a different emotion.

Michael - You need a kick? What kind of kick?

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Ow...

/goes checking out title on IMDB and wiki. Oh. I see. Plus, it's only 45 minutes. So, doesn't really cut into hypothetical writing time, too.

Oh well. You win some, you lose some.

It's the journey that counts? Plus, anything goes when it drives Lois insane? Michael

Sue, both parts are wonderful as always. Looking forward for more stories from you

Michael - Anything goes? 'Cause I can think of lots of ways to drive Lois insane. It's always nice to see a lurker come out to play. Thank you so much! I'm delighted you enjoyed the stories.

My eternal thanks to everyone who's left comments. I'm in a kind of FDK sugar shock now. And it's lovely... You all helped me immensely. My mojo returned and I got a lot of writing/polishing done on my other story. THANK YOU!

Poor Lois, what a horrible feeling.

I love that Lois gets so worked up that she includes Clark's behavior towards Linda while on assignment as part of the betrayal. And then that she takes it to this level of irrationality. Hee!

And just like that!

In the face of such a huge discovery, I like that she processes this so early on. I adore reading Lois' thoughts throughout this entire scene with Superman, especially once the kissing starts.

Good choice.

Love.

Woohoo!

Perfect companion piece. Great work, Sue!

Oooh! So, different POV, not an epilogue.

<claps>

Oh, Lois.

Well, she *does* know a guy who knows guys.

Poor Lois.

Awww.

Though, it *is* a little strange he didn't duck into the men's room to remove it. Ah well!

I really like this.

Love the slow progression here. First, she's upset about the Superman kiss. Then, it morphes into being upset over Linda and Clark. Wonderful.



Go, Clark!!




Really loved both sides of this story! Well done! Brava!

Not how I saw it, Virginia.

I saw it as a) perfect is boring. And b) *practice* makes perfect. So, she's really just opening the door for lots more nights where they make love.

</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Deadly Chakram:
<strong> Not how I saw it, Virginia.

</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by VirginiaR:
<strong> </font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Deadly Chakram:
<strong> Not how I saw it, Virginia.

Look at this! I wander away for a couple of days and the thread fills up with all kinds of lovely comments! (Psst - check your email...) I don't think you can often use the words "rational" and "Lois Lane" in the same sentence. She has amazing leaps of logic but she tends to use her emotions more than she'd ever admit to anyone (including herself).

DC - You came back for the second half! Yay! I'm glad you liked both stories. To be fair to Clark, he wiped at it and then Lois did, so he didn't realize there was still a little left. Thanks! That was one of the chief reasons a second story was necessary. It does indeed. It's better than gloating - she knows something Linda never will. Me, too! I love writing Clark's double meanings, but writing one for Lois is even more fun. Yes, exactly!

Then Virginia said: Sue changed the line, I see, since my note.

I did?!?

I remember making a mental note to review it and telling Virginia that I would try to shade it so it was more obvious they were teasing each other, but I don't remember actually changing anything. So I scrolled up to where Virginia quoted the lines in her FDK and opened a second window to look at the story… Nope, no change. Sorry, I never tweaked it. I wasn't sure how to do it. I'm open to suggestions, if anyone has one.

Hmmmm. I guess you're right (as you would know). I was going by the lines that DC quoted which we higher up in the story.

Of course I did! It was a great story!

Although, I admit that coming into the second half, I thought it was going to be Clark coming completely clean with Lois. I never expected a POV shift. And, for the record, I think the POV shift was a MUCH better choice.

Valid point

And by the very end, she'll know a *lot* more about Clark than Linda ever will.

Virginia - I apologize if you feel like I was picking on you, I never meant to give you that impression. You're right - no two people read a story the same way. That's part of what makes reading through the FDK so rewarding. Almost always someone comes up with an insight that I didn't specifically have in mind and it tickles me to see the story through new eyes. Please forgive me if I hurt your feelings.

</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Sue S.:
<strong> Virginia - I apologize if you feel like I was picking on you, I never meant to give you that impression. You're right - no two people read a story the same way. That's part of what makes reading through the FDK so rewarding. Almost always someone comes up with an insight that I didn't specifically have in mind and it tickles me to see the story through new eyes. Please forgive me if I hurt your feelings. Nah, just kidding. You didn't hurt my feelings. I'm sure Clark is fine with me caring a little too much about his feelings. And I'm okay with being the one who follows the path less taken. Anyone who knows me (or has read my stories) knows I'm a little messed up.

So, you've got a new story coming soon, huh? Any ETA?

Oh, Virginia, I'm so glad! The more I thought about it, the worse I felt. Yeah, he probably is. That big baby. :p You say "messed up", we say "Kerth nominated author". I'm thinking it will be about another month before I start posting. It's written, but I want to get it most of the way through the beta/tweaking process before I start.

My thanks again to everyone who's left comments. You all helped more than you know.