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Corrina

Hooray for Barry! And hooray for Lois sitting down to talk!

Just popping in to let you know I've been reading and enjoying this. And you totally made me laugh with:



I so remember those days! My first programming job was on an IBM PC with 128K RAM and a 30 Mb hard drive! I thought I could do anything with it. Very nice touch.

I just wonder if young Lois is going to poke around and learn something about Robert James' wife that will compromise her current situation. And the lead poisoning angle makes me think that Tempus is actually her boss at the hotel. Of course, that might very well be what you want us to think. So now I've got to figure out what you don't want us to think, because that's probably the real Tempus.

Or not. You're good at misdirection.

Excellent story, fun read. I can't wait to see how the three of them thwart the villain this time.

And Paul stinks! Boo Paul!

Oh great job setting up the young Lois and our Clark meeting. I still don't see why Lois can't let her know she is OK from the other side of the door. Good job though. I can't wait to find out what Clark is willing to tell her. Laura

Like Terry I'm just dropping a line to say good job! Keep it up.

Does anyone remember the IBM 5520? I do...(Shudder!)

Great part! I love all of young Lois's reactions to Clark, how she's drawn to him but fights it--exactly like we know Lois to do. Great line about him being an unmovable pillar.

I'm glad Barry is seeming to be a good guy, but that just makes me more curious about who Tempus is. If he even shows himself. On the one hand, it's his personality to be a bit flamboyant, but on the other hand, if he really is getting desperate, he might be laying low. Looking forward to finding out the truth!

Cheers
Elizabeth

Great chapter!

But I wonder, if it's lead poisoning, why just Lois is being affected? Is there lead in her apartment, too?

Glad to see that Barry seems to be a good guy. He likes Lois and worries about her, although she ignores him most of the time. Bad Lois.

Andreia

From part 9:
I just realized I got terribly confused. From Young Lois’s POV, Paul and Linda always planned on going this weekend. And Young Lois told Clark that Paul would be in town this weekend. But when did Clark learn Paul’s away this weekend? Or should have been away the next weekend? I very likely forgot something…

/imagines this being fancy speak for “The spring-break-like beach party has just started and the rowdy crowd’s assembled around the belly-shot bar.”

Michael

Amy Barry. Uhm. Perhaps he's a good guy.

Terry How wonderful to hear from you, Terry. I've missed reading your comments on the boards. And as a bonus, you're reading my fic!

Three of them - yes. But possibly not the three you're thinking!

Laura Young Lois is a bit volatile. They're handling her with care so she doesn't blow up!

Morgana I didn't have much to do with computers in the early days. When my husband did 'computer programming' in high school, he had to send cards away to the nearest university (70 miles) and get them back for the next lesson, because the school had no computers.

AntiK In the early stories of this series, Lois didn't really fight her attraction too much - not like canon. Also she wasn't really snarky with him. I couldn't let Clark escape completely, so now he's having to deal with a Lois that's a little less refined than the one he met.

Elizabeth

For whatever reason, this story seemed to need a long, slow build up. Thanks for sticking with me through it.

Posting? This fic is finished. However the next story is still in tatters. The only reason I'm not posting more quickly is because I anticipate there will be a break between LA 16 and Part 1 of the next story, and I'm trying to keep it short. However, if you're willing to accept there will be a delay between stories, I can speed up the posting on this story.

Andreia Good questions. And good insight on Young Lois.

Michael

In Part 2 or 3 (Friday afternoon), Paul announced he was going away for the weekend. Linda agreed to go with him. Young Lois arranged for 'Robert' to meet Paul before she knew about the trip, but she had no intention of telling Paul anyway. (There's one small line - Robert asks if Paul will be there, Lois *says* 'yes' but thinks 'not on a Saturday'.)

When she discovers that Robert is in her hotel, she realises she doesn't need to track him (from the supposed meeting to wherever he is living) and decides to reschedule the bogus meeting to within her work hours to give her a chance to check on Robert's wife.

Clark knows nothing about Paul and Linda's trip until Lois finds the address and phone number on Paul's desk, gets Clark to check their apartments and finds them empty, and does a Lois Lane Leap to suspect they are away *this* weekend.

Is that *any* clearer?

Good questions re timing.

Have you hacked my files, Michael?

Thanks for the comments!

Corrina.

My new bet is that it's Linda.

Thanks. So it really just is the Leap

/shifty eyes/ People keep accusing me of it Michael