Wow, I am absolutely astounded by the level of feedback on this story -- two pages?? Almost 40 posts?? You guys really know how to make me feel good!
I'm so glad that you liked it. I actually started the story last fall and had it sitting at 80% done for months until I finally got inspired to finish it up. And based on this response, I'm certainly glad I did!
I'm especially pleased at how many of you mentioned the descriptions of the weather, and how it drew you more deeply into the story. Knowing it made you feel as if you were experiencing the same thing is a really compliment to a writer. Thank you so much for saying so.
One question that I did want to respond to ...
Crazy Babe commented:
I can understand why Lois was being distant and a little withdrawn from Clark, but I really don't understand the whole reason why she would trust him enough to start sleeping with im yet the moment she discovers that she is pregnant she turns her back on him.
I don't think Lois turned her back on him as much as she panicked and her defenses shot back up. As she explains to Clark on the porch, it wasn't so much that she was afraid that he would abandon her, but that he would assume she'd trapped him and would come to resent her. At first, she was in denial (both natural and out of necessity), but as they came to Smallville, her fears were starting to take over and she just didn't know how to tell him, out of fear she'd ruin everything. I actually see a lot of parallels to many of the revelation stories where Clark delays telling Lois because he thinks she'll leave him, and I tried to bring that out just a little in their conversations.
Oh, and also keep in mind that she is in the early stages of pregnancy, coupled with the stress of working super-long days and getting a huge shock. Between her hormones and the extreme exhaustion she must have been feeling -- both physical and mental -- I hope you don't judge her too harshly.
This cries out for a sequel! The Kents have to be told, Perry has to be told... <g>
So when's the sequel?
... this screams for a sequel.
(among others!)
Wow, I can't believe how many people asked about a sequel. I almost hate to tell you that I have no plans to write one ... sorry!
I truly hope it doesn't "scream for a sequel", though ... I really thought I had wrapped everything up for them. I guess I'll just have to hope you were all asking out of desire to spend more time with the characters and not because you felt the story itself didn't having a satisfying ending.
I'm hoping to see a certain other fic here before too long...
Now how bout that other story you're working on...hmmm?
and did I hear right? You're hiding a fic from us? Bad Kathy! Go post more now!
LOL! Hey, we need to finish it first! <g>
What Wendy was so subtley (NOT!
) refering to is a little joint effort on the part of AnnieM and myself. We got a little sidetracked this week due to our finishing up our respective stories (this one for me, PtW for her) but we're back working on it now and hopefully will have something to post before *too* much longer.
Oh, yes, and I can't close without saying ...
All of the dialogue was great!!! Come to think of it, EVERYTHING was great!!! So, I should stop pointing out what I liked or I'll just end up quoting the whole story in here. But I've gotta say that the end was just perfect - a great resolution to Clark's and the readers' worries about how Lois really was feeling about the baby!
That Jill is officially my new best friend.
Thanks, again, everyone! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And thank you so much for the amazing feedback.
Kathy