FDK: Momentum 2 (part 6/7) - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Well, you knew the hot tub was coming ... just maybe not where you expected it to be? Clark has finally gotten up the courage to tell her ... hopefully it was worth the wait.

Kathy

Well, Kathy, you're definitely a member in good standing of the Evil Author's Club -- what a spot for a cliffhanger!

Lots of funny lines in here, and I like the discussion of their hypothetical honeymoon -- and that Lois is surprised how that makes her feel all warm and fuzzy...

I do love that part, though... they're so close and loving, and then Clark totally throws her for a loop... but hey, at least he got the words out! And good for her, for instantly catching the reference!

PJ

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Slowly, she reached up to pull off his glasses, then gasped as she studied his bare face. "Oh ... my ... God."

KATHY IS

gerry

Kathy,

Great hot tub scene -- and the chocolate strawberries--wow!

But what I loved most of all was the switch or play on the words 'ordinary man'.

Now that she *does* love the ordinary man, could she love the extra-ordinary part of him? Very nicely phrased and said by Clark in such a way that she should really understand what he wanted/needed and hopefully would get in a response from her.

Can't wait to see if she does or has to go through a manic phase before she finally arrives where she should be -- in his arms.

Barb.

Hi,

Great part.

Love the description of hot tub.

More soon, please.

MAF

*falls over* Now that's what I call a revelation. But how can you leave it there?! You evil evil woman. Come back here!

Hmmmmm, lots of yucky stuff going on here, but no whams! Bummer.

Nice turn about revelation. Hopefully this will lead to some nasty wham.

You can post the ending earlier if you wish.

Tank (who wonders, if Pam is one of the beta readers for this story - did she just give away the ending?

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Now that's what I call a revelation!

Eee, we need to speed up time so Monday will come soon!

JD

Thanks, everyone; I'm so glad you're enjoying the story.

And I cannot even express how completely delighted I am by the reaction to the revelation!

Barb wrote,

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But what I loved most of all was the switch or play on the words 'ordinary man'.

Now that she *does* love the ordinary man, could she love the extra-ordinary part of him? Very nicely phrased and said by Clark in such a way that she should really understand what he wanted/needed and hopefully would get in a response from her.

Thank you, Barb! And as Gerry now probably realizes, this is the line that she suggested that inspired the whole story.

I'll quote from her email to me from last December, after I'd asked Momentum readers for suggestions for a quick epilogue revelation:

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... Clark might ask her if she'd go out with Superman if he asked her. She might in fun say yes because then she could tell her grandchildren that she once had had a date with Superman, but she didn't think that she
could take it seriously. She couldn't go skating with him or go to a movie. Clark might build up Superman in a playful way until Lois says something like,

"Clark, I can't believe that you're trying to encourage my crush on Superman."

"Well, now that I know that you love me, I need to know that you love all of me, and just not the ordinary man."

And the light dawns.

As you can see, the story got a lot more involved than a couple page epilogue (I can't believe I've topped out at over 180K for the gfic version, LOL!), but this was the line that had me sitting up straight in my chair, sputtering that I just *had* to write a story around it. So thanks, Gerry, for inspiring me so completely.

Isn't it amazing how an entire story can start with just one line?

Thanks for your comments everyone! And as for me being evil by leaving Lois's gasp as a cliffhanger ... I guess I better post the conclusion.

Kathy